Still alive

Here it go's

Watch it fall

Can't stop now

Too late to reconsider

So suck it up

Push it through

Keep on going

Through tumult and terror

No time to rest

Flames burn the brains

Of a mindless people

In a dark and dirty land

Live on in the name

Of things given up

In time immemorial

Struggle for light

In a place of night

A burning bush

Screams at the fools

On the path of obedience

Without thought

A new winter

For men's souls

Descending on Earth

Fires burn like ice

On the skin

Of a planet

As an era ends

Capturing a spark

Let it burn in a jar

Hold it up for the people

Bring them together

Teach the uneducated

How to live on

Now it all falls

To those of us

Still alive

Reviews

[M.Babu]

A few corrections you might consider maybe: the first line 'here it go's' should probably be 'here it goes' maybe? Tell me if i'm wrong.

But aside from that i appreciate the message in this piece. Life can sometimes be a never ending fight...a trek through difficulty at the end of it we can find even a moment of solitude...which i think shouldn't be downplayed.

I love the power in these words...
"Teach the uneducated
How to live on
Now it all falls
To those of us
Still alive"

This was a wonderful read my friend.

~M.Babu~

[Coyote Poetry]

Some old wise saying somewhere. "As long as we are alive. We will have hope."
"No time to rest
Flames burn the brains
Of a mindless people
In a dark and dirty land"
I like the strong statements in the poem. A strong ending to a outstanding poem. Thank you.
Coyote

[Rayne Stanton]

awesome, but the third line of the fourth stanza is kinda confusing. it just seems out of place. however, beautifully written :)

[brenda]

you have talent! and you know how to express your feelings this is awesome!!:)

[Awkward]

Really good poem I liked the way it all flowed together!
Also I don't know if you did it for any purpose but shouldn't go's be goes?
Anyways, great write.

[Blue Moon Ice Cream]

I kind of relate this to the fact that someday our generation will be leading the world (as teachers never tire of telling us). It's a bit of a scary thought. :)

"go's" --> "goes"

[Kenneth The Poet]

Hellbound, need more be said.

Great work.

[Lily Mae]

It feels like a Armageddon of a belief system and of people in general.. especially with the "A new winter for men's souls, descending on Earth"... This one really had me wondering.. I love it..xx