Humanity

Humanity

A Poem by Jake Staffeld
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This one is pretty dark, guys.

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Wake up abandoned

No one is anything

Under the micrscope

Of humanity

 

On trial for life

Crimes have been commited

By all of us

That claim humanity

 

We are the end point

Of this lying line

The buck stops here

Along with the blood shed

By humanity

 

Monsters rear

In the mind's eye

As rivers flow ugly red

Wash away with a flood

Signs of humanity

 

World restored

To Chaos and Hate

Trademarks of those

Who make up

Humanity

© 2011 Jake Staffeld


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Dark indeed...good images, though; I like the second-to-last stanza especially. I think you mean "rivers" instead of "river's"; that seems to make more sense. Also, "lieing" = "lying." The way you work the word "humanity" into the last line of every stanza is neat.

Posted 13 Years Ago


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This is good. Darkness usually precedes the brightest light. I really really like the end...who make up humanity, I have many interpretations for this.

Posted 13 Years Ago


Fitting tribute. I have written some dark stuff about humankind too.

Go on Youtube and find a video called "Pale Blue Dot". That will probably inspire you to write even darker stuff.

Nice work.

Posted 13 Years Ago


Disturbingly proper!

~M.Babu~

Posted 13 Years Ago


Wonderful poem in a darkly sense.. love your imagery and the flow. My fave lines:

Monsters rear
In the mind's eye
As rivers flow ugly red

Awesome job!

Posted 13 Years Ago


so true!!!! i love it !!

Posted 13 Years Ago


Humanity is not often spoke by men and woman who can do great charge. Only time man show kindness is when something terrible happen and the world will try to work together. I pray we won't need a complete city laid to rest for man to find his desire for peace. Not greed and more money. A excellent poem. You words made me think this morning.
Coyote

Posted 13 Years Ago


0 of 1 people found this review constructive.

I'm more into happy poems, but this had a nice choice of metaphors and words.

Posted 13 Years Ago


The last stanza was good. I loved this poem. Great write

Posted 13 Years Ago


this is very intense! I can feel the emotion and darkness in it, very good write....I like the way you described the hideous aspects of 'humanity'...the second & fourth stanzas are absolutely chilling! great piece :)

Posted 13 Years Ago



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Jake Staffeld

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