Shine

Climb to the top of these

Mountain like obstacles

These days drag on

Don't stop searching

For the night

It's right in front 

Of your face

Rest is all you need

When the day won't end

You'll find love and hate

Realize that mice and men

Are all small in the end

So now's the time

Grab the fire

And do with it

What you please

Now that you shine

Like the sun in the sky

Reviews

[Shane Williams]

I like it, uplifiting. Works very well

[AndyJCash]

That middle stanza is a winner! It seems to put everything into perspective in the world. It's great!

[Coyote Poetry]

I like the statements in this poem.
"You'll find love and hate
Realize that mice and men
Are all small in the end"
I like the field trip you took me with your words. Thank you for the outstanding poem.
Coyote

[Little Abbey]

Very nicely done! Though I found one small error. Mountain needs to be Moutains.

[Vanessa Rico]

So talented you are! The descriptions are amazing, and I could picture this perfectly in my head!

[M.Babu]

"Rest is all you need
When the day won't end
You'll find love and hate
Realize that mice and men
Are all small in the end"
Favorite part this was!

Nice concept my friend. Keep writing!

~M.Babu~

[*~DreamDeamon~*]

thats such a happy little poem. Diffinatly shines itself. :)

[Skoo.]

I absolutely love this, it's so uplifting :D
Thanks for my first RR since I turned them back on, keep writing (:

[Ravyne Hawke]

This is an excellent write, Jake. I love your similes, your imagery.. the flow is purely perfection :) Great write!