Twisted Tongue

 

I speak with a twisted tongue

Because I have a free soul

And a young heart

with a different mindset of yours.

Why are sins called sins?

and virtues are virtues?

Is wrath  a sin,

When used to stop an act of wrong?

Is greed  a sin,

When used to feed your dear ones?

Because there was envy,

That we compete to become better than anyone.

If we show no pride in what we do,

Then there will be no one to respect us and our work.

Humans are unique and different

Like the way they control their emotions

Sins are not sins, if we can learn from it.

My poem might be wicked but then

I am not writing for someone to like it.

I don't believe in just one God, so for this time

they can forgive me for my words

Is charity a virtue,

when offered to alcoholics and gamblers?

Is temperance a virtue,

when are wrongs deeds used to secure justice and honor?

Why is kindness a virtue,

When provided to a friend who is becoming corrupted?

When did humility become a virtue,

When your bravery is for a selective reason?

Is patience a virtue,

When you are suffering from the violence of society?

Humans are unique and different

Like the way they control their emotions

Virtues are not virtues, if we can't learn from it.

It is a modern time,

A time we have to accept the change,

Before we have to accept the Days of Apocalypse.

When did our heart become as cold as metal?

Why our body weak like wood?

Where are the Fire of Revolution?

Why my thought are not flowing like a water?

Why do I feel blood on the Earth?

I asked this question again to myself

As all the elements are used for wars,

and sins for sins,

And virtues are not even applied.

I speak with a twisted tongue,

So no offense to those with pen in their hands

"What is the use of Great Literature,

If we can't change the thought of human?"

"What is Great Literature,

If we can't bring the spark of revolution and change?" 

Reviews

[nightshade]

I really love how analytical your thoughts are while still having the beauty and flow of poetry. I like how you question everything I wish more people would question things before just accepting them

[Bushra Naqshbandi]

A unique, creative and interesting poem that forces one to think. Superbly penned. The poem is so revolutionary in it's thinking. Great job! :)

I speak with a twisted tongue
Because I have a free soul
And a young heart
with a different mindset of yours.
Beautiful beginning. I like the reasons you've give for the arguments which you're going to undertake as they're very sincere and genuine. :) But ''mindset of yours'' gives the sentence a different meaning. As I take it, you wanted to say that your minset differs from others. In that case, you should change the words to ''different mindset from yours''.

Is wrath a sin,
When used to stop an act of wrong?
Is greed a sin,
When used to feed your dear ones?
A perfectly arguable case. Very well written. :)
Because there was envy,
That we compete to become better than anyone.
The argument here is good as well but in ''that we compete......'', ''that'' doesn't fit here. It should simply be
''Because there was envy,
We compete to become better than anyone''.
If we show no pride on what we do,
Then there will be no one to respect us and our work.
Again, a great argument. :) However, we don't say ''pride 'on'...... ''. If I say I'm proud, then it becomes ''I'm proud 'of' myself'' and if I'm proud of a ability it becomes ''I took pride in writing''. So the sentence should either be ''If we're not proud of what we do'' or ''If we don't feel pride in what we do''. :)

Humans are unique and different
Like the way they control their emotions
Beautifully expressed. Hats off! :)
Sins are not a sins, if we can learn from it.
Since you're talking about sins, you can't use ''a'' or ''it'' so the sentence should be ''sins are not sins if we can learn from them'' or ''a sin is not a sin if we can learn from it.'' The sentence is so meaningful. I loved it. :)

My poem might be wicked but then
I am not writing for someone to like it.
Wow! I loved your attitude here. :) This is exactly how it should be. Expressing the truth no matter what people say. Wonderful work! :)

I don't believe in just one God, so for this time
they can forgive me for my words
We all have our beliefs and we need to respect each others' beliefs. No religion teaches hatred. Nicely written. :) However, ''for this time'' is not grammatically correct. It should either be ''for the time'' or ''this time''.
Is charity a virtue,
when offered to alcoholics and gamblers?
Is temperance a virtue,
when wrongs deeds are used to secure justice and honor?
Awesome thinking! :)
Why is kindness a virtue,
When provided to a friend who is becoming corrupted?
''Corrupted'' with ''becoming'' isn't correct. It should either be ''being corrupted'' or ''becoming corrupt''. Apart from this, the lines are superb! Way to go! :)
When did humility became a virtue,
When your bravery is for selective reason?
It should be ''for a selective reason'' and yeah the argument is so good I feel ashamed. :)

Is patience a virtue,
When you are suffering violence of society?
Definitely not. Fantastic argument. I'm short of words actually. :)

Humans are unique and different
Like the way they control their emotions
Virtues are not a virtues, if we can't learn from it.
Just as for ''sins'', you can't use ''a'' or ''it'' for ''virtues. Great lines, though. :)

It is a modern time,
A time we have to accept the change,
Before we have to accept the Days of Apocalypse.
When did our heart become as cold as metal?
Why our body weak like wood?
Beautiful lines! :)

Where are the Fire of Revolution.
Since it's ''fire'' the words should be ''where 'is' the .......''

Why my thought are not flowing like a water?
For ''thought' it should be ''is not flowing'' but I think you meant ''thoughts'' here. Also it should ''like water'' not ''like a water''.
As all the elements are used for wars,
and sins for sins,
And virtues are not even applied.
Beautifully written. Great work! :)

"What is the use of Great Literature,
If we can't change the thought of human?"
"What is Great Literature,
If we can't bring the spark of revolution and change?"
What an amazing ending. You're so right about this. Hats off for suc great thinking put so marvellously and creatively into words. :) Just one correction however, you've written ''thought of human'' but it should be ''thinking of humans'' because thinking covers all types of thoughts whereas if you say just ''the thought'' it means some particular type of thought.

A really great poem. Very, very well done. Brilliant thinking. I salute you. :)

[Miyank]

Thank You Bushra, for your detailed reviews. I really like it when people give their truthful reviews. As for mistakes in my poems, yeah there are a lot which is now almost visible to everyone as it is habitual in my style. Thank You, I will try to keep up with this level of poem.