Dear Friends

Dear Friends

A Poem by Miyank

Dear Friends,
Thank You for your support.
You made me stand up again
In this stage called World.

I thought this world is too unfair,
Talented people ruled over hard work.
Starting line is too far for
Cowards like me
But my friends, you ran with me
In this slow pace for me,
We crossed this finish line together

We celebrated achievement of each our friends
We laughed at each others' silliest jokes
We danced at every song played by our mates
We cried at each other's pain
We dream of  our buddy's romantic stories
We cheated every time, our friend stopped writing

Those were the best days
I thought i will miss until you all
Give me hands and pushed me forward
To live a rose colored life.

Dear Friends,
Thank You for your support
You made me perform again
On this stage called Life.

© 2015 Miyank


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A nice and heartfelt writeup! :)

You made me stand up again
In this stage called World.
I thought this world is too unfair,
Talented people ruled over hard work.
This is a reality we all feel at one point or the other. Nicely expressed. :)

We crossed this finish line together
I think it ought to be ''this finishing line'' not ''this finish line''.

We celebrated achievement of each our friends
Since you're talking about friends, it'll be achievements and not achievement.

We dream of our buddy's romantic stories
Given the tense of the poem ''We dreamt'' would be more appropriate that ''We dream''

I thought i will miss until you all
Give me hands and pushed me forward
Again it shoud be ''I 'would' miss'' and not ''I 'will' miss''. Also it should be ''GAVE me ''a hand'' and pushed me forward'' or ''give me ''a hand'' and ''push me forward''. Given the tense of the poem, the former would appear more suitable.

Thank You for your support
You made me perform again
On this stage called Life.
A beautiful note to end the poem on. :)

Overall an appreciable poem and a good effort. Good going! :)

Posted 9 Years Ago



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Miyank
Miyank

Delhi-NCR, Haryana, India



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