Losses

Losses

A Poem by Phoenix

I've lost a doll once

When I was young,

I cried and cried,

It was my favorite one.

 

I've lost my balance once

Tore open my knee,

It was the first time I worried

Of my insides spilling out

For the world to see.

 

 

I've lost a key once

To my old diary,

But found it still opened -

Penetrating my secrets

Quite easily.

 

I've lost my way once

Between here and there,

A place without a map,

It was a burden I couldn't share.

 

I've lost a family once

My whole life, my heart -

There's no way to describe it,

There's nowhere to start.

 

I've lost my friends once

Twice as alone as ever before,

I was torn away,

Leaving nothing but an open sore.

 

I've lost a life once

Her eyes closed, without a care,

I watched her, finding it hard to realize

That she wasn't really there.

 

I've lost my hope once

In everything around me,

I closed my eyes,

I didn't want to see.

 

I've lost my strength once

And everything inside was gone,

I didn't know what to do,

I barely held on.

 

And I've lost my life once

In a terrifying dream -

Everyone gone, and me to follow,

So it had seemed.

I was as scared as could be,

But as I stood there

A calm had come over me.

I stared ahead, back held straight,

Facing what was to come,

Knowing my fate.

I died in that dream,

But woke up and breathed

Finding my strength was back

To keep fear and doubt sheathed.

© 2008 Phoenix


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Wow, I felt that. Such a deep poem that anyone could relate to. I like how you start it off with something simple yet understandable and then, make the losses a little more devastating towards the end. I admire what you've got here. Excellent ending! Strength can always be found. ^^

Thanks for posting this! It was a phenomenal poem! :)

Eternally Yours.

Posted 16 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.




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This was a great poem, full of bravery and strong resolve.
Well done!

Posted 14 Years Ago


Tremendous Hope in the end! Kind of poems that often my friends and critics tell to me of my poems - "That it starts with sorrow and grief,... but gradually wins and ends with hope, confidence and light!"

Beautiful write friend! And so freely flowing! Hope this Hope wins the "Hope of 2010"! :)

Posted 14 Years Ago


That moment before your death, that moment of acceptance and peace, that made this poem. Incredible.

Posted 15 Years Ago


lot of insight here hon.. happy to see you didn't allow the struggles you encountered to to best you, but triumphed in the end like the infamous Phoenix! :D

Faerie Blessings!

--faerie whisper (breaking the silence...)

PS: Hi from Phoenix, Arizona! :D

Posted 16 Years Ago


Wow, I felt that. Such a deep poem that anyone could relate to. I like how you start it off with something simple yet understandable and then, make the losses a little more devastating towards the end. I admire what you've got here. Excellent ending! Strength can always be found. ^^

Thanks for posting this! It was a phenomenal poem! :)

Eternally Yours.

Posted 16 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.


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Phoenix

Zushi, Japan



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