America Ahead / Freedom Is...

An old middle school poetry assignment I dug up. I think the assignment was to write based on the title you were given.

 

 

"My son, my only son. Please listen to me,"

Says the father. "On this boat you may not realize,

But what lies ahead of you is a great prize."

He looked ahead through fog and mist,

Clutching his hand over his son's tiny wrist.

"There is a land called America ahead."

"What about it, Father?" the son said.

 

"Think, my son, of where we came from,

We were told what to be and what to say.

But now we go to a land of freedom,

And you"ll be free when you wake each day."

 

"Though the streets will not be paved in gold,

And the sun will not shine every day,

You'll know in your heart and in your soul

That you'll be free no matter what you say."

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(Dug up another middle school poem)

Freedom is

Freedom smells like

A feild of grass in the summer.

Freedom looks like

Children playing on the beach.

Freedom sounds like

Wind blowing through the trees.

Freedom feels like

The sun on your face.

Freedom tastes like

A freshly picked apple.

Freedom is

Like eating a fresh apple at

The beach in the summer while

The wind blows through your hair.

Author's Note

When I got this title, I pictured a scene with a father and son on a boat right away. I remember that it was kind of fun writing this. And it sort of became more than just a class assignment by the end...even if you don't like the way it was written, I hope you at least find the idea rather touching, like I did.

The second one is kind of goofy, but that's the format we had to use. I think it's kind of funny.

Reviews

[Blade & Blood (The ..]

Great work! I wish I would've read it back then when we were in middle school. It's very inspirational, and--I don't know... it just makes me feel good when read it, knowing that people felt like there was brand new hope an ocean away. :) lol

When it comes to structure, I definitely agree with Faerie Whisper. ^^ The dialogue is awesome! I must say, you've been quite the poetic type for a long time and I didn't even know it. :P Excellent work! I'm glad you found this. ^^

Eternally Yours.

[Staci Brown]

i like your poem and the dialog back and forth, but it's too bad it isn't true... america is so oppressive and our freedoms??? most are being squashed and some have never even been recognized...

Faerie Blessings!

--faerie whisper (breaking the silence...)

[Alexander Fox]

Wow. I really liked it. I enjoy how you are never uncomfortable writing from the eyes of the opposite sex. It's exhilirating, because i have troubles trying to portray women in poems, period.