Minute.

We stop for the black as it rolls into our head,
The purring whir of a pause, a blink, a breath.

Stop. Click. Rewind.

We start with the day,
eager, afraid of glamour and of love,
living vines of friendship when
you touch my hand,
turn your head as
the sun frames the look.

Stop. Click.

For a minute we're stunned.
The world watches and cries
and laughs, somebody said
a popstar was dead,
or a legend lives on,
(I forget which)
But the world is in mourning,
draped black for one story.

Stop.

Two men dead,
(Engaged, married, loved)
flown fresh from the Afghan soil,
flown back through the lines of
jet streams and sun rays
and old age pensioners
lining the streets in a
quaint country town.
The world is revolving,
turned to night and hid
for these two stories.

Stop. Click. Rewind.

The sun's caught you again...
A laugh for the moment,
a thought for a minute.

We breathe...
and move on.

Author's Note

work in progress...

Reviews

[spence]

The first line had me thinking from the off- I love words that make me think out of my box and that is possibly the best description of sleep I've ever read!
The 'stop, click rewind' really works for me too, it breaks up the stanzas nicely and gives a'groundhog day' impression- even though each stanza has different expressions and depictions it made me think that this could be different observations of the same day that was drifted through without much thought. I'm glad this is a work in progress, cos I really wanted it to go on- loved the observational element on current affiairs and the line 'a postar was dead, or a legend lives on (I forget which) cracked me up, nice one bud, spence

[Avoiry]

Gah!! This makes me so happy as the concept of time is one of my favorite things to bend my head around. Stop Click Rewind! So basic but so wishful in a realist world. Erase the shadow and bring back what was but in the end there will only be what was and whate will be as there is no true repeat. Wonderful .

[Jeff]

This is great! If this is a work in progress can't wait to see the finished product!

[Kathryn]

I like the message and I really like where you are going with this. I can't wait to read the finished product.

[C. Porter]

This is one of the best poems I've read in a while..absolutely loved it!

[Seracies]

Wow. There were so many parts that caught my attention, made me think. I loved the flow and pace of it, it was slow and easy to breathe my way through. It was even more effective because of the slow pace because then I could really absorb what I was reading.
I loved the whole feel of it, of reminiscing and remembering to the parts where the thoughts were a mute view of the callous side of humanity.
It was great how so much happened it that one minute, a real moment. Great write.

[Lauren Beth]

Really great imagery. I also love the stop. click. rewind....it really works! Awesome :)

[Legion]

A nicely done work in progress. Want to see the rest when you finish it. A true Kodak moment for sure. Kudos.

[Jenn Wathen]

Very interesting! I like the stop click rewind.. its cool! i like it!!

[Soul Writer]

Yeah, well done, you really deserved it, its a great poem, and i'm happy with my 3rd :)
Congrats :)

Soul Writer