One Day

One day, you wake.
You groan and flick
on your eyes.
You get up,
Drink this,
Eat that,
You pack your
bag and head
off.

You go to a city
and search around,
You go here,
look there,
turn this way
and twist around...
You're ever
searching but
never see.

You become a
graceless
anomaly.

You sit, you stare,
feel strong
the silence
roaring.
You hate, you love
and leave those
thoughts
longing.


One day, you wake,
you groan and look up.
You step back
and away you
leap, run and jump
above the clouds
and look out on
creation.
 

Author's Note

simplish language... what sort of a feel do you get from this poem? If any at all.

Reviews

[Lauren Beth]

I really liked this piece, very relatable to many different people, I think. I got the same negative vibe at first that turns around to a positive outlook, as was said. I got that you go through day after day, just going through the motions not really working towards anything or looking forward to anything, your just kinda floating through life. Then one morning you wake up and you "seize the day" and have something to live for, jump away from the duldrums of your everyday. Maybe not what you intended but thats what I felt with first read. I enjoyed it, thanks.

[poemprincess]

This is awesome! I felt a cool vibe from this poem. Good Job:)

[Rebecca Rogers]

The feel I get from this is someone who doesn't truly see the world for what it is, and then wakes up one morning, realizing there's more out there than what they see.

Nice work!!

[Butch Decatoria]

It is just one day... maybe another day will look and be written differently. I enjoyed this tremendously. Thank you. Peace.

~~Pfluffer

At first I got a negative vibe from the poem but then it turned positive. To me the poem seems to be about how you go through each day and it's all the same and you get tired, restless. Then one day, you really wake up and decide that you need a positive attitude, a change.