Un mezz'idea per Mascagni;

A poem of four parts. One breath that contains two responses; flight or fight. 2 worldly influences; the glory of creation and the persecution of men. Try and figure it out, it's all there. If not, just enjoy the ride!

Something strong hits me then,
And now I'm gobsmacked by
God's creation.
But before this gorgeous run in,
I see you and take a breath.

Something about you,
Your wild, frenzied hair,
Your brusque attack and
frontal stride,
The Cut of your dress,
The Height of your boots,
The manner that you looked
and moved.

I was moved by you.
In that breath I wanted to
form a rock band, write
platonic, streaking songs
about love and war,
I wanted to amplify the
screams of jublilation
and jump into roaring crowds,
I wanted to be on that
stage and see you with
your wild hair and willful
ways just looking at
me like I was your saviour.

And I would smile knowingly
back because I knew that
I would never love you,
That you were my muse,
nothing else.


But in that same breath,
as you stand before me,
I wanted to run fleeing
into orchestral pits,
I wanted to lose myself
in the graceful chords
and violin strings,
to float up on cello solos,
to befriend the mourning
oboe, to swim up in
the dizzying heights surged
with power and fall softly
in sudden
diminuendos.

I wanted nothing more
than to hide in the corn
fields of Arias and
Symphonic melodies.

Because it's all ups
and it's all downs.
You see,

One minute you
gaze at the sun.

The next your
under attack.

And the breath

Breathes

Out.

 

Author's Note

The Title of the Poem was changed from 'Una mezz'idea per Mozart' to 'Una mezz'idea per Mascagni'. The reason for this is because I realised the classical piece that so bluntly contrasted with my desire to form a rock band was Mascagni's famous 'Intermezzo'. It's this piece I wanted to be lost in, and if you ever play it, you might know what I mean.

Reviews

[Stephanie]

Woah..... this was something else! The way it flowed and everything it said... Beautiful. I did get a lost in the piece, and it was pretty cool. Really awesome write :]

[We are young.]

I got completley lost in this! It was amazing, I loved it, I cant even tell you whats wrong with it, because none of it got off track or lost its flow, this is amazing.

[Orlando Murcia]

You have a very creative way with words, I enjoyed your poem bud keep up the good work. Orlando Murcia

[Hedra Helix]

Ohhh man I love this!! I cant even tell you! Great great great!

In that breath I wanted to
form a rock band, write
platonic, streaking songs
about love and war,

bad a*s!
Wow

(that was a pretty worthless review as far as crit but sometimes it just needs that wow!) wow. feel it, dig it;)
thanks.

[Siddartha Beth Pierce]

Wow, very powerful. Your musical references are quite moving and eloquent. There is such a smack in the face as you have found a muse 'but nothing else' - very powerful words. Thank you. Great work!
Light,
Siddartha