Nanosecond.

Trying to paint on a poet's canvas everything that happens in one nanosecond.

Then in a blur all nations faded, The clouds rolled swiftly by and sunsets came and went. The seeds were hatched, the eggs made, the flies came, the flies went; and all of creation, all nations stood standstill in the midst of a cloud, watching the lark rise with malice to settle in the centre of the sun before falling, and falling deep and suddenly as burning leaves on a tearless moonlit night. In a blur, in a blink of an eye, all this happened today. And I just stood wondering; Utterly confused.

Reviews

[TidgeTiger]

:) i enjoyed this, it was different to something i write, so i connected to something new, and i really enjoyed it, thanks for sharing.

[Ruby]

I really like this. The short line lengths really seem to make it like that nanosecond in which everything happens, like everything is going in fast forward. Your poetry has a lovely sense of rhythm to it. I hope you keep writing beyond the confusion.

[PhoeniX]

i would have to say im standing here utterly confused as well. a lot of things happened within this piece. i can understand your confusion. good job

[Katie Foutz Voss]

I like this nanosecond. Though, I wish your description of it was longer. I think the repetitions make it seem short. You repeat the word blur, and cloud, and the phrasing around them is so similar... maybe I am crazy. Anyways. The imagery is exquisite. I have a television in my head, so I really enjoy pictures in words. Nicely done.

[~crazy Beautiful~]

eternally one second, that is what i think of after reading this, very creative
vivid imagery
nice work
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[Damian Alan Gray]

A poignant vision of the apocalypse. Well-toned, well-metered, well-written. I enjoyed this very much. Nice job!

[The Archangel Gabriel]

All of eternity can pass in the blink of an eye. You did a wonderful job capturing this. Well penned.

-Gabe

[Brenda Sue]

Great imagery. Wonderfully penned. Great job.

[Angel Bird]

You definitely painted in the most vivid colors a beautiful and impressive nanosecond on the poet's canvas.

The passage I like most is

In a blur, in a blink of an eye,
all this happened today.
And I just stood wondering;
Utterly confused.

.....

[Siddartha Beth Pierce]

Beautiful and vivid imagery captured in this work. What an undertaking. Truly moving. I often stand or even sit wondering. As Aristotle said, 'Philosophy begins in wonder and wonder is the duty of the Philosopher.' I believe you have captured that essence here. Great work.
Light,
Siddartha