Today..

Stabbing my own pale skin,

What kind of messed up world do we live in?

I hate my life, I hate everything in it..

Clamping my tongue so I cannot scream it.

Why am I so bloody worthless?

Why is the standard so close to perfect?

I deserve all my pain.

I truly am the one to blame.

Reviews

[Mockingbird]

this person sounds like she's in the middle of an anxiety attack. the desperation comes through. she blames herself when she shouldn't. she's hurt. you don't deserve your pain. you just have to learn to cope with it or let the ones who care about you the most help you get through this. a cry for help. great poem.

[ShaneBerry]

hmm, dark toned and very emotive.
it seems like this short bit shows a deep dark fantasy almost. i do disagree with one of the ideas in this poem the,
'standard being so close to perfect' in my life i have seen the exact opposite. but maybe that is just me.
there where no spelling errors or grammatical issues in this poem at all which is very impressive for a poem of its type(most of these re written in a fit of rage and have terrible spelling haha)
i will say that, if these are your own thoughts and you are a cutter, you should talk to somone about it. i know how it is to be that was i was a urner for a bit in my younger teen years. but i grew up and got over myself. and that is the best thing you can do for yourself kiddo.thank you for shareing.
-S.B.-

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[Priya]

I am going through a similar phase right now. But keep hoping. Life is bound to change for the better one day :)

[M]

Maybe you might want to try writing free verse rather than rhyming in your poetry as well. The most powerful line for me in this piece is when you chose worthless and perfect which don't really rhyme.

[Cassie Fraga]

whoa... sooooooo intense!!! can feel the scream wanting release!!!! this was a very nice write sistah!!

[Calypso]

Aww you shouldn't be so tough on yourself

[Richy Moon]

Sometimes you do feel a little like "fml" and this poem is a perfect expression of that. Down without blaming anyone or being mean, I like it :)

[SkrillexLover :)]

Some people blame their selves when it wasnt their fault in the first place. I feel for those people. I wish they could see that sometimes it isnt their fault. Truly great poem :)

[patricia]

sad but very honest and well written.

[Lily Mae]

It's so strange how we inflict pain on ourselves to mute the pain on the outside. Funny thing is your so numb at that point that you can't really feel anymore.. funny how the body and mind block things.. You really have taken these emotions and penned them well. xo

[Emerald Seas]

Wow! This person is hurting, a great deal and feeling cornered, under a lot of pressure, etc. You capture the feelings of anxiety quite well in this poem. I'd advise her to take a step back, breathe, maybe sleep on it... and look outward for a solution instead of assigning blame to herself.