Today..

Stabbing my own pale skin,

What kind of messed up world do we live in?

I hate my life, I hate everything in it..

Clamping my tongue so I cannot scream it.

Why am I so bloody worthless?

Why is the standard so close to perfect?

I deserve all my pain.

I truly am the one to blame.

Reviews

[Mockingbird]

this person sounds like she's in the middle of an anxiety attack. the desperation comes through. she blames herself when she shouldn't. she's hurt. you don't deserve your pain. you just have to learn to cope with it or let the ones who care about you the most help you get through this. a cry for help. great poem.

[S. Michael Long]

and chance pain, never not, they cannot steal what i have got, they cannot take it im in charge, the choice for perfection the law lived large... i will choose who makes me fail (I) will decide who gets my bail, i am the woman who is tough enough.. i am the woman who calls your bluff, i am the weakness in your toughest truth.. i am the female who destroys you the chump the roof..

[Amer Almadani]

A day will come when you will look back at poems you wrote and ponder its authenticity. Objectivity was never a poet's perk, yet it is one for humans. I truly hope that day comes, because I fear that, subconsciously you are what you write. Besides that, It was a wonderful poem.

[emmajoy]

Shhhhhh now and think - and think carefully: when a woman can write words and make people feel, she can make heaven out of hell and believe me, trust me, you could and do. Never, never forget that. Please.

Blame is something we carry because we feel we should. Dump it and now! You know where i am if you feel like screaming or singing an anthem, take your pick, 'know which one i'd choose. :)

[.....]

This seems a bit chaotic and all over the place, you go back and forth from your personal emotions and feelings to questions about the world we live in. I think it's a little schizophrenic. Like you had two ideas and tried to put them together when maybe you needed to have two separate poems. I like the imagery in the lines about yourself and the use of metaphor.

I encourage you to keep writing to read and comment.

Blessings, Tammy

[Sunflower 20]

short and sharp. great job. i especially liked the ease with which each sentence flows and rhymes with the next one. keep it up! :)

[Tabitha t]

This makes me think of how the world today makes most norlam females feel worthless because of the high standards we are being compared to. honestly i like my women with curves and no makeup

[Cascara (aka Sprint Goe..]

raw and honest words

[Bell]

Thats amazing. How are you so f*****g awesome? love it

[The Pretender]

intense emotion, I feel your pain. Good write.