What's going on inside me.

Don’t try my phone,

I just want to be left alone,

My mind feels so weak,

I don’t wish to speak,

Sadness fills my bones,

My heart, nobody owns.

I’m searching for my purpose,

Feeling forever worthless,

All I can do is cry,

I just really want to die.

Author's Note

I wrote from the heart, I wrote my current feelings :P

so far it's the only poem i have written this week that i thoought was any good..hope you like it.

Reviews

[Bats In The Belfry]

Beautiful, hang in there, we all go through these periods in out life.

[rivers]

When we are overcome by these feelings it is difficult to write. I understand every word of your current stage. I too live this life and it can leave us with a pile of unused paper or a pile of in-congruent thoughts we feel to lost to complete. Many dark completed pages are the tallest pile...When the thoughts begin to regain structure, for me it's a sign that I'm crawling from rock bottom towards the light...Feel Better

[Jab]

Ooolala. Pretty good.

[Wondering Mind]

Most of us go through such times. I hope writing about it has helped you overcome the dark emotions.
The couplete structure and pace of the lines have helped in getting the point across to the reader. Nicely done

[ba_mcfarlane]

Hang in there girl, you put it in words, so you are halfway home to safe. Lots is gonna happen in this world, that you don't wanna miss.

TC

[.Lost Soul.]

Wow, this is powerful. You put it in such a way that the emotion basically flowed out of it. I don't know if this is how you feel right now but either way, it's very good.
Good job.(:
~Emmy~

[khalid]

nice work

[K.C. Zbryk]

Structure somtimes brings out a part of the author that some poeple never get to see. the truly refined and focused thoughts that wait to be carved out of a raw idea. I like this piece and the simple power behind the words. You capture this desire for isolation so clearly it jumps at the reader. Very well done.

[R J Askew]

Great stuff. It's great to see a bit of form coming out, great cos it just emphasises the points being made ... that's why the old style poets perfected form. But people got all antsy about it in the 20th century. As to the msg. All poets get a bit down at times. Now for a very, very, very serious point. A former WC poet has just died. It is very, very sad when a poet dies by their own hand. Art is one thing, dying for it is not worth it. That said sometimes writing about sad things is cathartic, does get the mood out of us, which is good.

[reflectingus]

Aww, it seems as if you wrote this poem as a way to feel better. I'd do the same, writing poetry during dark times makes me feel better. I can relate to the feeling, sometimes all I want to do is be with myself and pity about me. But then it gets better, that feeling goes away, you just gotta pull yourself back up, and it doesn't matter what your purpose is, you find it one day when you're not even looking for it. Because everyone is looking for themselves and discovering, and that's why you have a whole lifetime for it.