I have no idea what I was thinking...

One day when the sky is gray.

You’ll pray and pray for the bright sun’s ray.

To enter the sky, where the planes fly high,

Where the birds don’t quite fly,

You’ll watch the clouds pass by

and that will be the day...

Reviews

[KATHY SUE SILLS]

Love the way you left the ending up to the readers, excellent job!

[Leigh]

Quite profound, sad and full of longing of safe journeying through the course of life and its natural end. It makes me feel of rising up to heaven

[Extant]

A poem of want and wishing, if only this or that could be then all the world would be right. It's natural to think once in awhile if I could fly then isn't world peace possible, or the end of hunger, or the day I fall in love? Yes, that will be the day...

[Mockingbird]

it's like one of those suspense novels where there are two possible endings. this leaves you with a cliff hanger and you could provide your own ending.

[quarintine_deathangel]

It took a minute to comprehend the last line and it's full meaning, really true and good point about this sad reality XP Nice job!

[Who Cares]

I feel like you drop the reader off, you don't quite finish the thought... The poem was beautiful but it didn't really have a message.. like htis day what you are describing will be the day of what? Anyway nice rhyme scheme, and it pulls the poem together giving it a nice flow. Nice work Jenn

[luna11]

Wow.
A short and beautiful poem :D
Well done.
xx

[CrimsonBlaze]

It's short yeah, but beautiful-and outstanding. I loved the rhyming scheme, and even though it seems it doesn't say much, it says a whole lot of things that can fit into a book, :3

[zero binty]

You show optimism in the cloudy times of Life. So long as you have a little hope, there's always a way. And when you lose hope, there's people like me...