What Can I do?

What were you thinking?

When you ran away....

Was it something you did?

Were you having a bad day?

How can I help you?

Tell me what to say....

I don’t want to lose you

I want you to stay.

Reviews

[luna11]

Great poem :D It's short and simple but it's really good. I like how the lines are in different places. It sort of gives the impression that you don't know what to do...
Well done.
xx

[Octob3r Star]

Thank you for sharing : )

[exotic flotsam]

Nice simple style with some rhyming which works. Sad lamentation, but leave the protagonist in a submissive spot. Of course, that's what love's got to do to you.

[khalid]

good work

[Destiny Crawford]

I really like how you set up the poem :) Very nice!

[?]

very unique piec..like the structure

[Rae]

Great poem, I like the way it's arranged and scattered. One question though; Why do you send read requests for everything you write...?

[Siren]

I love the spacing on this. It fits perfectly with the array of thoughts that come crashing through your head. Great job, SP.

[Jock Engelman]

very incredible poem, but. why have you structured it the way that you have..?

[SlightlyOdd]

Short sweet simple one word awesome