What Can I do?

What Can I do?

A Poem by SuicidePact.

What were you thinking?

When you ran away....

Was it something you did?

Were you having a bad day?

How can I help you?

Tell me what to say....

I don’t want to lose you

I want you to stay.

© 2012 SuicidePact.


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Short, sweet and simple. well done.

Posted 12 Years Ago


Oh wow. This is just lovely. Simple, but complex.

Posted 12 Years Ago


not bad your work is gorgeous

Posted 12 Years Ago


Very beautiful for such a sad poem, your work is so beautiful though. Nice work Jenn

Posted 12 Years Ago


Nice poem with a good flow and leaving the reader to wonder just what has gone on.

Posted 12 Years Ago


A beautiful heart breaking poem! I love the format! Thanks for sharing!

Posted 12 Years Ago


A beautiful heart breaking poem! I love the format! Thanks for sharing!

Posted 12 Years Ago


Reads just like the questioning random thoughts that will most likely be left unanswered. Don't know the backstory, which is leading me down a road of endless possibilities. Very nice.

Posted 12 Years Ago


I really enjoy the back and forth format you used, it's quite effective!

Posted 12 Years Ago


i love how it represents questions in the beginning lines then the statement of not wanting to lose them. It reminds me of arguments between to people and how one of them is willing to fight and give up everything but the other person just doesnt have the same passion to keep it going, yet the fighting passionate person will do anything to make them stay. if that makes any sense? haha i loved it :)

Posted 12 Years Ago



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SuicidePact.
SuicidePact.

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