The Future.

I can see the future, when I close my eyes.

I can hardly wait, to approach its surprise.

I want lots of money,

I want lots of friends.

A great big house, on a nice block of land,

I want lots of children, that’s the life for me.

They‘d sure keep me busy.

I’d write during the night,

And work in the day.

Weekends for my man, when we’d get to play ;)

I can see the future, when I close my eyes.

I can hardly wait, to approach its surprise.

Reviews

[Sahar moonlight]

This was really so sweet.
I wonder about future, but i would never try to expect, just hope for the beeest:)

[ba_mcfarlane]

Sweet hopes, sweet dreams, sweet words. May all of your wishes come into your life

[I Shred This Cabbage]

It feels like a moment removed from worry wherein the narrator can think of only the positive in a selfish uncompromising way. Somehow seems a bit sorrowful, as if it will never come to this. I might be reading this wring but I enjoyed the poem interpreting it this way!

[☯]

I also think about the future often. I have mixed feelings about it though. One part of me yearns for it, the other wants to stay a teenager forever. But I really liked the rhyming and playing tune it had. Great job! :)

[dillonjensen]

Great rhyme scheme! When thinking about the future or any point in time for that matter, I think people often get too caught up in them. They either stay and live in fear of their past, or are far too concerned with the future and they forget about today. Live for today, today. And worry about tomorrow, tomorrow.

[Tina Kline]

A very beautiful and positive poem. It flows nicely which made reading it fun. I like the message in this...having hopes for one's life in the future is only good. Hope keeps us all going especially when times get hard. A truly wonderful poem!

[.....]

The flow of this is really good on the terminal rhymes. The capitalization of every line even when it doesn't start a new sentence is a bit off putting though. Capitalization (in my opinion) should be reserved for the beginning of new sentences, proper names and first person pronouns. But that's just a suggestion. It's a lovely thing to contemplate the future and all we hope it to be. Children, a fulfilling career, loving husband, home and all that. Hopefully the reality meets the expectations.

Blessings, Tammy

[Emerald Seas]

That's the spirit! The hopefulness and promise in this is well written. Life is full of things you don't plan, but enjoy the journey!

[Wendy Seames Garner]

It usually is a big surprise. My life is not what I had planned nor even could have expected. But I wouldn't have changed the choices I made if I knew in advance.