The love of his life...

I walk into my form classroom, a spring in my step,

As i watch the prettiest girl in world,

She’s sitting by herself,

Right in the middle of the crowd.

But when she spots me in the doorway

Her eyes light up the room.

Yes she is my baby,

The only girl for me.

I watch the faces of envy.

I don’t even care.

This girl, she has chosen me.

I shall never let her go.

Reviews

[Pencrafter]

This is a very simple poem of basic friendship. You could possibly cut the first line in half like this, "I walk in my former classroom," then the next line, "with a spring in my step". But, it's a pleasant poem. Nice job.

[Geraldine]

So sweet. :D Made me giggle actually. ^^

[Archia]

This seemed more of a story, in poetry form than an actual poem. And sorry, I'm probably seeming harsh, and I since I don't write poems I probably have no right to say that. But that is just how I saw that. It had no rhyme, not pattern, nothing but words that would be the same in one paragraph. It's still a nice story, a sweet one, and quite nice to get into the thoughts of this person.

[Alex Vidmar]

I have to agree with Katarina. Your darker works are good. and are missed. but your newer works are great too :)

[Who Cares]

Again, so very sweet.I have to admit I kinda miss your darker work. Though nice job

[Cathy Wattam]

This is a nice poem. I would say though it would sound better if the second line were to say "As I watch the prettiest girl in the world". It may just be a typo but otherwise lovely poem.

[quixotic_rose]

so adorable!! that moment when nothing else matters but the connection two people share together. LOVE :)

[Barbara Walker]

Sweet!

[eatmills]

Interesting. Like the narrative.