You.

You kissed me, when my eyes were closed.

You held me, we were fully clothed.

You touched me, when the feel arose

You loved me, when you felt it were right.

 You chose me; it was love at first sight.

You protected me, when I was caused a fright.

Reviews

[Angelic Surrender]

Nice :)

[S. Michael Long]

i love the poem, but i have to disagree that there are no discernible technical problems.. you capture the feeling that the reader desires, however, there are grammatical errors throughout that almost obfuscate what you are trying to say, i dont want to sound negative at all, because i love this, but.. here is what i am trying to say, i will redo it but you dont have to change a thing if you dont want to (:

You kissed me, while my eyes were closed.

You held me, and we were fully clothed.

You touched me, while our feelings grow

You loved me, when you felt it to be right.

You chose me; and said "it was love at first sight."

You protected me, in my darkest fright.

just my opinion lol, and trust me my opinion does not mean too much (: again i loved it! -s

[Pencrafter]

A well-written poem with no discernible spelling or technical problems. It's certainly simple and brief.

[Geraldine]

Simple, short yet very sweet. Good poem.

[Archia]

Short and sweet. I liked the flow the "You-" kept up. "You protected me, when I was caused a fright." This one sentence to me didn't make sense, but I still got the gist of it, which was good enough.

[Alex Vidmar]

Very sweet

[Pikachu]

Oh my. This is just a lovely piece. :D It's so sweet and Prince Charming-ish. (:

[Who Cares]

Repetition I like it, it gives a unique feel to your poem as well as the rhyme scheme. Nice though Jenn

[Cathy Wattam]

Nice poem, evoking emotion at a basic level and one which we can all relate to.

[quixotic_rose]

simple but very sweet. it captures how two people act toward one another in an intimate relationship with a person. very captivating :)