Criminal Within Me.

I wipe the tears from my eyes,

Wash the blood from my hands.

What have I done?

Why have I done it?

I’ll plead temporarily insane.

If I run now, maybe I won’t get caught.

If I run now maybe I’ll have a chance at life.

When they find me, it’s the end of me.

What will I tell them? My family and friends...

Will they believe me? When i say I don’t know why?

Will they comfort me? When I start to cry?

Reviews

[EMF]

A nice opening hook. Well structured and smoothly done, but you might want to consider expanding it, sometime in the future. It could be that there is an awful lot more there. I liked it as is though. If farms out so many questions to the reader that they can't help but become a small part of things

[Marie]

This sounds just like a person who has commited a crime and doesn't know what to do.

[Who Cares]

This was yet again another breath taking piece by Jenn. You show emotion and really display what goes through a criminals mind well. Great job sweetie

[Legion]

Not sure about this one. Seems more may be needed. The feeling is there but it seems there could be more to say within this.

[Secret Valentine]

I like this alot. It sounds like if you kept writing in such details and get more in depth with forming a character, it would be a lovely masterpiece...It should be a book. I loved reading this. Good job!

[Geraldine]

The first two lines already hooked me. ^^ And leaves me wanting to read the next line and the next and the next until I didn't noticed it's the end. :D haha very good write.

[J. J. Nightingale]

Seems like a good start to a book .. You leave us wanting more ! .. ..

I await your next write ! .. good !

Jasmine

[Sophie]

Love it! Nice flow, well done.

[Siren]

My favorite thing about this poem is that the word BLOOD stands out so boldly. My second favorite thing about this poem is the way it's shaped. It reminds me of a bottle, as if you drank a potion, an elixir, and out came this terrible beast within you--this criminal. Very well done, my friend. :)

[rosemary keogh]

I enjoyed this very much. Thanks for sharing.

[MandaBear]

You're truly talented girl