Criminal Within Me.

I wipe the tears from my eyes,

Wash the blood from my hands.

What have I done?

Why have I done it?

I’ll plead temporarily insane.

If I run now, maybe I won’t get caught.

If I run now maybe I’ll have a chance at life.

When they find me, it’s the end of me.

What will I tell them? My family and friends...

Will they believe me? When i say I don’t know why?

Will they comfort me? When I start to cry?

Reviews

[EMF]

A nice opening hook. Well structured and smoothly done, but you might want to consider expanding it, sometime in the future. It could be that there is an awful lot more there. I liked it as is though. If farms out so many questions to the reader that they can't help but become a small part of things

[Racy Daniel]

Definitely, it's a nice poem. Well done.
Short and meaningful.

...........Racy Daniel

[Chantel]

Ooh, I like this, I agree with EMF and Aella.lives that it could be expanded, but it's also good as is. Great job, keep writing!

[Aella.lives]

A very interesting write. I could definitely see this expanded, but I love it... especially the last line.

[☯]

Bottling emotions is really bad. But then again, I do it all the time. And then I take it out on others or even sometimes myself. It's hard to believe anyone would understand the emotions running in our heads, but there is people we can all benefit from. Being scared to voice it is normal, I really liked this, it made me remember those days where the world and myself were incompatible.

[Kaylor Mason]

This is cool. After a hot-blooded crime, there's nothing but confusion and panic. I especially like how you typed the word blood, with the red text and all--like you're having an inner monologue and you're shouting to yourself, and when you come to the word blood, your head nearly explodes in torment. "Will they comfort me? When I start to cry?". That line wraps it up quite nicely. :)

[Perdition]

Liked the way you splattered this with blood and question.

[Blindfolded]

A great write. It leaves the reader wondering what you've done that can be so bad.

[by S.D.]

The emotions are so realistic. My eyes went like this 0.0 (which is totally a good thing).
Awesome :D

[Laura Storm]

Really good, shows to confusion and fear. I also like the mystry left cause we don't really know what you did.