Criminal Within Me.

I wipe the tears from my eyes,

Wash the blood from my hands.

What have I done?

Why have I done it?

I’ll plead temporarily insane.

If I run now, maybe I won’t get caught.

If I run now maybe I’ll have a chance at life.

When they find me, it’s the end of me.

What will I tell them? My family and friends...

Will they believe me? When i say I don’t know why?

Will they comfort me? When I start to cry?

Reviews

[EMF]

A nice opening hook. Well structured and smoothly done, but you might want to consider expanding it, sometime in the future. It could be that there is an awful lot more there. I liked it as is though. If farms out so many questions to the reader that they can't help but become a small part of things

[Cathy Wattam]

Powerful stuff. Sometimes, the hardest subject mattters to write become the easiest to read. I also love the shape of the piece, it adds another dimension. Great.

[Stephany Anna]

Perfect flow. Very nice and deep meanings:)

[closed..acct]

deep write, nicely done

[Sleeping Maiden]

WOw. sweet poem this is. ha ha, you got me captivated from the first line!
Really good... and hmmm somehow it reminds me of a story... that i knew...
anyway, Great write!

[quixotic_rose]

I like this structure and creativity in this. Its amazing how you capture the feelings someone would probably have of their inner 'criminal' self. very nice :).

[khalid]

i donno what crime it was, and i havent lived this feeling before to know. nicely written

[AK]

Very nice...