HATE

I hate being scared.

I hate not knowing.

I hate being unprepared.

I hate feeling alone

I hate it when you aren’t there.

I hate not wanting to go home.

I hate not going anywhere

I hate who I am

I hate being me

I hate not having a friend

I hate it all can’t you see?

Reviews

[S. Michael Long]

yeah! yeah! this is nice (: the only thing i can be a critic about is, how you wrote, i hate being alone and hate not wanting to go home, put them together so it reads congruently. you should use the rhyme one after another so its near the middle since you don't emphasize rhyme in the whole poem. put the end rhyme verses one after another (put them in the middle) and leave the others alone. this poem needs to come to a point, (meaning it needs to be sharper) you can use the "home" and "alone" rhyme to sharpen the edge of the poem if you put them together (: you are a great writer! -s

[Victoria PoetryBunny]

I like the attitude in this, really nice and relatable and real.

[joshua deathdealer]

I like the construction and the f**k my life attitude. lol

[Tamia123]

Very simple and effective :) Good job!

[Sugar Plum ♥]

So great and original style and structure!! specially the word "hate" as it is repeating in nice way...I hate almost the same things :) next time, write about what you Love, please :)

[Tabitha t]

wish it could go onto expand onto the things that are not hated. instead of just going down i wish there was an epiphany and then a bright side.

[Barbara Walker]

The way you formatted this really lends itself to the emotional intent; the blackness and bleakness of this write. The format gave me a sense of urgency, to read this quickly, which flows alot better than when one reads it slowly. I don't think anyone could accuse you of being emotionally stunted! LOL.

[CHRIS ANDES]

i like it
very real
=]

[Angelic Surrender]

Nice. Full of emotion. I like it.

[Coyote Poetry]

The repetition made the poem stand out. I like the directness and the purpose of this poem. Hate is a good motivator. Can make us stronger and meaner. Can give us purpose to succeed. Thank you for the excellent poem.
Coyote

[Chantel]

I know how you feel.