(please help me name this.)

I can’t stop falling, even if I could I wouldn’t.

I just need to keep punishing myself, for all my mistakes.

Nowhere near perfection, I’m no bloody saint.

I just want my own easy escape, my personal getaway.

I can’t look into the mirror without filling my eyes with hateful tears.

It’s like I hate what I see, like i wish I wasn’t me.

You’ve seen the way they look at me, the way the snicker and stare.

If you were me you’d know exactly how that feels, exactly why I can’t deal.

Reviews

[Octob3r Star]

Personal Getaway? I name my own work, and I don't really believe in correction or anything like that. Art is what you make of it, not what someone tells you is misspelled or imperfect. Its what you think is perfect that matters, others only comment to correct or judge for self gratification. I guess its like an "I did something today" issue that's self evident. Good luck with naming your work. Cheers, have a good day. :)

[That_Guy]

Nowhere Near Perfection

[Marie]

I read the other reviews, and it seems "Personal Getaway" is the favored name for this piece. I might call it "Expiation."

[Becky Clancy]

I personally can't think of a name for this piece, but it sounds kinda sad and depressing, but I still enjoyed reading it, thanks for sharing (:

[patricia]

emotive and real, a good self-analysis, and one i can empathise with from my younger years, and still in part do. Thankyou.

[Tomislav Petricevic]

A great poem! But I don't know about the title though. Maybe something like "Shattered Depths".

[Alex Vidmar]

I like personal Getaway. But i also like "Imperfect Imperfections"

[zero binty]

Just about every day this is the way I feel. Except for the second line. I learned that everybody else wants to try to punish me. Then again the good news is that I learned to deal. What makes that even better is that everybody else stops trying to punish you after a short while. It doesn't take away from the tormenting feelings at the time, but after you've learned to deal, and the bonus of them stopping, you end up stronger. Take the parenthesis off, and there's your title.

[R J Askew]

'IF YOU WERE ME' that's what I'd go for. You nailed down that 'no one understands me' felling perfectly. We understand you :)))

[Raven Starhawk]

Although I cannot help with a title because I suck at titles this is still every bit amazing. I think the starting lines really gave me a hook because I have felt like this on so many occasions and it just seems to suck more and more you are stuck there. Anyway I really liked this wonderfully penned poem. It has everything I could actually detail and use to identify with.

[Thomas Fitzgerald]

The Injustice! x