My Girl Crush.

She was like nothing  I’d ever seen before,

The way she walked into a room, everyone stopped and everyone stared.

I wished and I hoped, that one day she would notice me.

I’d dream about her cherry coloured lips, and her sweet scented perfume.

I just wanted her for my own, I want to stare into her eyes, I want to be with her alone.

I have no idea, I really have no clue as to whether she would want me,

A stupid little Ranga girl. No I’m not anything special, I’m really just plain Jane.

She probably has a boyfriend, he’s probably captain of the football team.

She deserves so much better, so I’ll keep my crush inside me.

She’ll never know I love her, no one shall ever know.

Reviews

[Kaine]

I don't know how personal this poem is to you, but I'm sure this is reality to some, so I feel like I should treat it as a personal thing.
I may not be the best suited person to comment on this topic, because when on rare occasion I actually have a crush on someone, or something along those lines, I tend to unabashedly admit it, with no concern for that persons gender or sexual orientation. I honestly don't think it matters; rejection feels the same regardless.
But this is about acceptance, I think(?), and as I just explained, I'm not inclined to be concerned about that, but I still feel the priorities are a little messed up. Of course, that's not something I could blame anyone for, except for maybe saying that something is wrong with the world in general. In the end, I think the only thing that matters is whether you can accept yourself for being who you are. Some people will reject you, some will even hate you, but that kind of contempt is something that pertains to anything remotely different from the norm; it's not limited to sexual oriontetion. The moment that kind of hardship becomes unbearable, is the moment you let it get to you and actually start believing that something is wrong with you. On the other hand, if you can accept yourself for who you are, that kind of hardship becomes a test of courage that ultimately will strengthen your resolve and leave you with a greater feeling of achievement. I think. Sorry, that was kind of a long ramble.
Anyway, the possibility of rejection comes later; first is acceptance of yourself and your own feelings. Gender doesn't matter in that equation.

[Priya]

Beautiful :) Expresses the difficulties encountered when we experience that hopeless sensation of falling irrevocably in love, entranced by beauty

[Angelic Surrender]

Nice :) well written. Good job

[These Haunted Hallways]

Hehe, awesome!! I've felt like this many of times in my life. I've thought the exact same words, but was just too afraid to speak up. Heh, funny, too, cause i havent found the right girl for me yet =/ Im still afraid. Not of committment, but just actually taking the first step of asking a girl out and stuff. I think the exact same things. Im just too afraid. About a lot of things :'( Great piece tho. Twas written very well!! :D

[AK]

Very nice:)
I guess you could use 'everyone stopped, and stared' as the sentence gets too long. Try shortening the sentence 'I just wanted her for my own..' it gets long and distorts the flow.
When I read the line 'A stupid little Ranga girl' I was confused are you talking about the guy's crush or...?
Ok, it was really very good. Don't mind my criticism.

[WiLL i e]

This would be a perspective more befitting a man than a woman. Men can look at a woman and think of all kinds of things they would like to do with and to her without knowing so much as her name let alone anything about her character. So if this truly is "fiction" attribute it to a typical guy ;)

[Thomas Fitzgerald]

A fictional written prose, well worth the read.

[That_Guy]

I do all my best writing on Review post lol

[SuicidePact.]

Ok people, this is fiction

and boys haha I don't mind, your coversations amused me!

[Lowesy]

the day you figure out how to plant that idea into a girl's head, is the day you'll win a Nobel Prize!! And yeah, I think we did, sorry people and SuicidePact.

[zero binty]

Really enjoyed this one, but in todays' atmosphere, more than accepted. No one will speak for you, you have to gather the courage to be that person with the confidence. Who says she doesn't see you in the same light? Plain Jane is not always a bad thing.