No escape.

I feel so scared, like there's no one to protect me.

I can't find my feet in a world of darkness.

Can't find my way, there is no easy escape.

I wan't to run, but my legs don't seem to work.

 

Reviews

[Marie]

Sonetimes it seems as if there is no excape. Perhaps it's a nightmare?

[Perfect Mistake]

simplicity runs through this but gets the point through. Good work

[stars are far]

Short..Simple but reflects the idea so well ..
Great work :)

[Thomas Fitzgerald]

Short, simple and to the point, leaves ther reader satisfied, well done, good read

[Siren]

This is good. It shows how stuck you feel. *hug hug* I believe in you. Just because there's no easy escape doesn't mean there's no escape at all. :)

[Raven Starhawk]

I have felt this was a few times before. It is like danger is all around you, in every pocket of space and no matter where you turn the danger is always there in wait. I have panic attacks. So this makes the world of sense to me.

[patricia]

the shortness of this, gives it weight, when you feel that scared it is hard to find many words, my legs are always the first to go on me. You captured the emotion here really well. Thanks.

[Tasha]

This was really good. I do think you could have made it longer. I really liked the last sentence.

[AK]

Really very good topic to write about! 'want' not 'wan't'. Plus, I didn't really feel the fear or the helplessness. I would appreciate a few more adjectives- 'quivering legs', 'thumping heart', 'drenched in cold sweat', et cetera.
The ending is a bit abrupt. The flow doesn't seem to flow? Ok, I know I'm real rude so forgive me. Have a good day!
Akanksha Suresh

[Priya]

Short but good. I don't know how I really feel about this poem, though because although I acknowledge that there are times when nothing goes right, when everything is horrid, I also believe that human capacity for change and survival far exceeds any other emotion. Overall, nice poem though :)

P.S. In the last line, "wan't" should actually be "want"