Crap.

Hold me in your arms, don't let me break away.

I look into your eyes, I fall into your spell, you captivate my heart.

You entice my inner thoughts, I can't help but want you more.

I can feel you breathing, your chest rise and fall beneath me.

I can feel your warm skin, pressed upon mine, my hearts racing fiercly, just thinking our closeness.

I want to feel your warms lips interracting with my cold tongue, I want to hear you whisper my name,

Send shivers down my body, I want to feel that tingling sensation, I want to feel you now.

 

 

 

Author's Note

#I have a lack of inspiration at the moment so this is terrible and probably not even finished.

Reviews

[AK]

Jenna, this is amazing! One of your best poems might I add. I don't know why you say it is terrible! It shows thoughts so wonderfully and I really liked the fact that you decided to use some words out of your wonderful vocabulary.
'interacting' not 'interracting' please. You could try breaking the poem up like this-
Hold me in your arms,
don't let me break away.
I look into your eyes,
I fall into your spell,
you captivate my heart.
You entice my inner thoughts,
I can't help but want you more.
I can feel you breathing,
your chest rise and fall beneath me.
I can feel your warm skin,
pressed upon mine,
my hearts racing fiercly,
just thinking our closeness.
I want to feel your warms lips
interracting with my cold tongue,
I want to hear you whisper my name,
Send shivers down my body,
I want to feel that tingling sensation,
I want to feel you now.

This gives more strength to each line. I also feel, capitulate would sound better than captivate. The title could be something more interesting? Crap doesn't suit such a non-crappy poem. Great, great poem!
 
 

[Rasputin]

Does the title reflect your opinion about the quality of the poem, or am I missing something? I thought there was gonna be something much more disgusting behind the name "Crap".

[WiLL i e]

Akanksha hit it right on the money. I concur. good work