Think About it?

How can you do something you were never taught?

If you can never even picture a single happy thought.

All those children crying, tears are being shed.

Is it something you did, or is it soemthing you said?

How am I meant to know what you feel if you don't show it?

Do you really just expect me to already know it?

I can't read minds, no I'm not telepathic.

Give love to those who mean to most to you.

Or your little girl will grow up to be who you fear the most.

 

Reviews

[Emerald Seas]

I really like this, the tempo is great, although the end is a bit off from the rest of the piece. Maybe you deliberately set it apart? Children and parents struggle to have each other understood. One the teacher, guider for life's trials ahead, and the other the student. Some parents lack the skill to lovingly guide their children to adulthood. You capture the difficulties from a child's perspective quite well here.

[J. J. Nightingale]

WHO IS THIS AIMED AT .. A PARENT ? .. WHO ARE ALL THOSE CHILDREN ...

O WELL I THINK I UNDERSTAND ... IF WE LISTEN .. WE LEARN ..

JJAZZY

[AK]

Wow! Nice write.

[Missy Moooooo]

Nice job . (: Amazing write.

[Suze]

Love it ~ straight forward and strong.

[Shy Girl]

That was a trouble some outlook on expectations of what one wants...but fails to understand that pressure obscures the meanings..well placed or not. Thank you for the RR :)

[BS Johnson]

Pretty good, there! I agree with the punctuation errors that Lowesy said, but other than that, great job!!

[Lowesy]

getting better, the question mark should be on the second line, not the first as it's a continuation of the question, not the end. The last two lines stuttered but it didn't distract. Second from bottom line should be a 'the', after the 'no' in the third from bottom line there should be a comma. Also, perhaps make the font a bit bigger, my eyes hurt :D Good job though!

[That_Guy]

awesome write, Well done

[patricia]

ooh, that last line is very powerful. This is a great communication improving piece. I loved it all. Thanks.

[Thomas Fitzgerald]

SHort and to the point, a most intriguing read, well done.