Untitled Poem.

Broken pieces without any glue.

I'm searching for answers; can you give me some clues?

With hundreds of directions I'm destined to fail.

Stepping over cracks, not breaking my back.

Walking around the ladder, avoiding the black cat.

Some say I’m superstitious, what do you think about that?

Reviews

[Alex Vidmar]

The title could easily be "Superstitious" I love it anyways. you are an amazing author! keep me posted!

[Tomislav Petricevic]

This poem is so true, I've been in that kind of situations a few times. Great write.

[Dayran]

Had the poem continued its course, it appears to me, you may have used an expression to rhyme with ' I'll be back to do it again.' Nice write!

[Rasputin]

The rhythm is jaunty and energetic, like one of those childhood rhymes that sounds creepier as you get older. Like how "Ring Around The Rosie" is really about people dying of the Bubonic Plague. If you ever have kids, you should teach this to them.

[Barbara Walker]

For such a serious subject, I think it has a jaunty musical flow to it:) Nothing wrong with having a light hearted ending and this is good as far as it goes. You are such a good writer, I'd like to see you take this further, go a little deeper. Really like the first two lines! Actually, I find the first five lines to be a great beginning to an outstanding poem!

[Siren]

Hm. I never really expected this to be about superstitions. But this is good. I like it. Great write!

[K.C. Zbryk]

I think superstitions on a whole are fascinating and in all reality most were made for a reasonable purpose. Umbrellas knock crap over, people fall off ladders, and we all love our mothers. Usually. But i like the whole low of this poem and how you packed a lot of thought into such a small piece. Left me thinking. Good topic great poem and the small rhyme scheme gave this a wonderful flow. Like part of a song...

[xSamilynnx]

i think its really good o.o :D

[Sugar Plum ♥]

Really its nice connection between the red color and the meaning...When you feel lost or confused, you have to think in yourself...
~nia~

[Cascara (aka Sprint Goe..]

nice flow!