Kaetalita, that's a strange name.

July 20th 1989

 

Today me and Tera surfed the waves together, It was as though there was a silent competition going on, and i still don't know who's the winner. afterward we waded upon the waters surface, sitting on our boards, legs dangled in the cool waters. We were talking and talking, just like old friends, like we had known eachother forever. Don't get me wrong I'm still angry at him for invading my land, but at times I'm just lonely and Tera's always there, I need someone to talk to.

 

"So, do you go to school around here?" he asks me.

"No, after a while Dad got sick of picking me up from the principals office, so I've been home schooled for most of my life."

"Smart move."

"Hey!" I scoop up the water and fling it across at him, but it's definately hard to use this method of annoyance on a surfer, we love the water.

"Do you know many of the locals?" Another question, man he is curious.

"Tera, I know those who are worth knowing."

"Even me?"

"Sure, even you." I guess he had me there.

"Shucks, thanks Kat."

"Kaetalita" I correct him.

"Kaetalita, You have such a beautiful name, it's unique, haven't heard it before."

"My Mother made it up. She wanted to call me Katey, But Dad has his heart set on Lalita, after his grandmother, My name was a compromise."

"Katey seems so plain"

"She had her heart set out on leaving this place, she hated it here, hated all the traditions, hated the island, but she never made it out."

Hot tears were starting to form in my eyes, but there was no way I was letting myself cry in front of this bafoon.

"I miss my Mum too." he whispers, well i thought it was a whisper, the wind started to pick up and the sound was drained out, we started to paddle into shore, where we talked some more.

 

I was home later than usual, My father was already asleep on the couch, so I switched off the television and went off to bed.

Reviews

[symmetryAsymmetry]

I found myself reading someone's chitchat...no grave philosophical or spiritual discussion, no extremely funny wisecracks...and yet it kept me interested till the last word...and also, your descriptions of the surroundings and the setting are very vivid...the picture builds itself smoothly in the readers mind...
great job here :-)

[Alex Vidmar]

This is great. Love this. Really do. Well done Jenn.

[quixotic_rose]

shes slowly liking him. i can tell!

[Bats In The Belfry]

I like reading work that makes you reflect on thoughts or feelings you have experienced in your own life but you your self never put into words. "It was as though there was a silent competition going on, and i still don't know who's the winner" I had to laugh at how many times Ive been in this situation. Good chapter! I hope you continue with it.

[Dayran]

Rhymes with Catalina, off the California coast.

[Brantwijn]

This felt very real, very much a "slice of life" vignette, with a terrific setting and impelling characters. I enjoyed it quite a lot.

[Tamia123]

Good chapter :) I loved her name :D Can't wait to read more! Update soon :)

[jennifer little]

great work i loved reading this and thanks for sharing this with me

[patricia]

The first paragraph leads the reader into the scene and brings us up to date really well, in just a few lines.
As always your dialogue is flawless
i loved the ending of this, and the image of the wind picking up, coupled with the paddling to shore. Excellent, readable and enjoyable chapter. Thanks.

[khalid]

very nice

[Who Cares]

I like this, It is interesting and I love the name Kaetalita it is beautiful.