secrets

secrets

A Poem by SuicidePact.

Everybody has a secret,

Something they don't wish to share.

Perhaps if you knew it, you'd stop and you'd stare

A best friend would keep your's, until you're enemies

Then suddenly she'd have to key to the end of me.

Secrets can be dangerous, be careful who you trust.

Because one day it may come back and bite you on the butt.

 

© 2012 SuicidePact.


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I like the language used here. So simple yet so realistic, with a tiny bit of humor. "be careful who you trust"

Posted 12 Years Ago


Damn .. you said it girl! This is very very true. Amazing write :))

Posted 12 Years Ago


I liked the approachable and simple language, it suited the tone of the poem. Like a common saying being recited to someone. On a point of constructive criticism, yours doesn't require an apostrophe as 'your' already indicates possession.

The sentiment is something that we all acknowledge, and I believe it necessitates two responses. One, to keep certain things to oneself out of fear of discovery. But this I think is unhealthy and does not allow someone to truly be themselves. The other response is to have no secrets, to live your life openly and unabashedly - to be hated or loved for who and what you are without exception. The choice is always our own of course.

Regardless I enjoyed this little piece, and look forward to reading more of your work.

Sincerely,
A.E.

Posted 12 Years Ago


So true. So, very true.

Posted 12 Years Ago


really good... very true too... i usually never tell my secrets just for that reason (the secrets can be dangerous part)

Posted 12 Years Ago


you did good! nice little warning there, too. I liked this. :)

Posted 12 Years Ago


Ha ha nice poem, sounds like play with funny ending, and make you thoughtful!
Thank you for sharing :)
~ nia

Posted 12 Years Ago


this is so honest...

Posted 12 Years Ago


Thanks for sharing that.

Posted 12 Years Ago


This was really wise.
Thats why some secrets arent meant to be shared even with friends.
maybe a piece of paper can be best friend to share with in my opinion

Posted 12 Years Ago



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