What I wrote instead of doing QCS

LIFE is a ball game and you're the next batter.

 

LIFE is a battlefield and my hand's on the trigger.

 

LOVE is the key to happiness

 

LOVE is the reason for war.

 

HOPE is a dream, a reason to keep going.

 

HOPE is an untruth, setting you up for dissapointment.

 

TRUST is something you earn, not soemthing you're given.

 

TRUST is a gamble, where you can lose everything.

 

Reviews

[SlightlyOdd]

I agree this is really good

[Morrigan Nicole]

I agree as well, i especially like the end

"TRUST is something you earn, not soemthing you're given.

TRUST is a gamble, where you can lose everything."

it speaks aloud, really. Wonderful!

[That_Guy]

I agree. Great write

[Marie]

I like the way you give opposite meanings to your central themes...and there is a negative to every positive. "dissapointment" is spelled with one s.

[Angelic Surrender]

profound. This is awesome :)

[Alex Vidmar]

This is good. I like it.

[patricia]

I always want these poems that begin with capital words to spell out something downwards but they never do. Trust is something you earn, not something you're given. (my favourite line)
Thanks. Nice little though provokers.

[Jibey]

Well constructed and a good idea carried through the writing..

Sp: disappointment

[jennifer little]

nice poem i loved reading it great job thanks for sharing this with me