It started with a kiss.

It started with a kiss just as simple as that.

Which turned into a glance everytime you walked past.

Which then turned into a touch, a simple little nudge.

There's that feeling in deep inside your soul;

You tingle, you squirm.and suddenly you give in.

Your hearts beating faster, beating against his.

Eyes wandering, Hands fondling,

he's all over you, and you're all over him.

It started so simple,and look at you now.

You have four kids, and you're only 22.

 

Reviews

[Miss Marie Riorden.]

I read your profile before reviewing anything, or in any case, reading something. A suggestion: You should capatilize all the first letters of a word in a title, unless it's words like "the" and "of."

Poem: 6th line, the word "hearts" should have an appostrophe, or you should make it singular and add "is."
This is something different than all the other writing I've read. It doesn't go over the line, but it has just enough detail and emotion to understand what's going on. I also think this has great rhythm for having no rhyme scheme.
It shows the feeling of lust, and love in one poem.
Thanks for sharing.

-Marie Riorden-