Story of my life

When I saw you

I knew you were the one.

you had a girlfriend, but to me that didn't matter.

So i kissed you and you kissed me back

I knew you liked me, I knew that for a fact

I get what I want, and I wanted you.

You wouldn't leave her, you said that was a stupid thing to do.

And when she dumped you, I thought that meant I had a chance,

But you took her back and I was cut.

And so was my body.

Then she dumped you yet again,

This time you came running back

You were with me, Oh boy was she happy.

Now you're devoted, to me and me only.

She treated you badly, something I never will,

I won't forget all the pain that you caused me,

But baby, Oh baby I love you with all my being.

 

Author's Note

#Don't judge me because I was involved with a Cheater, he isn't like that, his gf was an emotional abuser, didn't care that he was depressed, treated him like Crap. and She was really horrible, we were friends both vulnverable at the time, suffering depression which led us together. I'm not some home wrecker, and i do not support cheating!!

#this is not a very good poem.

Reviews

[reflectingus]

I love the story of your life. This is so realistic, I have seen this kind of stuff happening, so it's actually easy to relate to. I love how you have just simply put down all your feelings, and no, I don't think this is a crap poem, and yes, the idea is great, though I think it would be great if you make it a bit longer, work a bit harder on it, because I've read your other works, so yeah, I know you can turn this great beginning into a masterpiece. :)

PS- I'm glad you guys ended up being together ;)

[AchingAlexandra]

this sounds like what I'm in the middle of right now o.0
Nice write !

[Victoria PoetryBunny]

Nice poem with a story that your author's note helps to explain, nice.

[fireblossom]

This is a good poem. Don't try to make jagged things smooth. That's like an opera singer trying to sing the blues...

I like this poem as is...

[Amila Jay]

A great poem!!

[Becky Clancy]

I really like this poem as well, but was both joyful and sad at the same time, you really know how to write with your emotions and that is what I like (:

i like this story as well, its is naturally beautiful. I can relate to this because my poems are reality as well. When you write more realistic and natural your poem or writing becomes beautiful

[SapphirianVampiress]

This is sad and joyfull at once it is amazing. I love it

[SlightlyOdd]

The idea is fine you might want to expand on it is very realistic and kind of raw i like that

[Morrigan Nicole]

The story is fine, girl! Liked it a lot. this does seem to be the love life of many a teeneagers to date. And it hurts every time, no matter who, what, when, where or why. life is like that. and you captured it well! Great, again!