Rain, fall down and wash me away

Standing in a shower of rain,

I've dropped my life into a puddle,

Let the heavens wash away my pain,

Hold my hand to prevent my stumble.

 

If I fall will you pick me up?

If you slip what would we do?

Standing in the ran, Wash me away.

Wash me away,

Reviews

[That_Guy]

great imagery

[Marie]

This is a clever idea, aboyt the rain washing you away...like the line "I've dropped my life into a puddle..."

[Angelic Surrender]

This is beautiful :)

[J. J. Nightingale]

Relying on one to catch you .. Drawing strength from Love ... and finding trust ..

I like your words .. Jasmine

[Ayanda Mteto]

its a beautiful poem, short and simple speaking from the heart :-)

[patricia]

Loved everything about this poem. The imagery. The italics. The mood you created. My favourite line was...Let the heavens wash away my pain. Thanks.

[Jibey]

It would make a good song... 'dropped my life into a puddle' - nicely put

[Your Perfect Disaster]

The title reminds me of a song by kelly clarkson. I love the poem tho ^-^

[Ruth]

This is concisely lovely! Great imagery used, the life...poised on the palm...dropped....wash it away...what is left of the self? Awesome love! xoxo

[jennifer little]

i like this poem its awsome great write loved reading it thanks for sharing this piece wiht me