My Night Last night

This is a true story of what happened between my bf and me...except for the ending! hes' aLIVE!

He told me life wasn't worth living,

I told him to live for me,

 

He told me he stuffs everything up,

I told him he still has me,

 

He told me he's not worth it,

I told him he's worth the world.

 

He told me he'd never be happy,

so I told him, I'd make him.

 

He told me he loves me,

I told him, I'll never stop.

 

He told me he wants  to end everything.

so I asked if that included me.

 

He said, No babe, don't twist what I say,

I said, but I thought I was your everything.

 

He's suicidal and there's nothing I can do,

and I wiped the tears from my eyes as I cried,

 

"You're the only thing keeping me here" he said

"Please don't leave me!" I begged and I begged

 

But it was no use, he was already dead.

 

 

 

Author's Note

# he didn't actually die, but i thought that was a good ending

Reviews

[Your Perfect Disaster]

I've had talks like this many a time into the night. Just sitting there, listening and letting others talk to me, calming them out of thoughts. I really like this and it's sad that this is real because i know the pain that comes with a suicidal person is very intense. Keep writing though, it's a lovely poem. ^-^

[SlightlyOdd]

That's so sad but great poetry all your poems have great flow

[BS Johnson]

Wow. I'm glad you cleared that up for me at the end!! I was stricken with sadness there for a moment.... lol. But it was a great poem! I thoroughly enjoyed. Thank you.

[jennifer little]

i loved your work thanks for sharing it with me

[Roe]

Such a painful write...... Great emotion

[Alex Vidmar]

Wow. so true for so many friends of suicidals. Love this one. :)

[Who Cares]

This was extremely powerful and the ending was hardcore. Death is always a great topic to write about because everyone can relate to it, but writing about suicide can be a bit more difficult because you have to be spot on with all of your descriptions. Overall a fabulous piece of work.

[Abram Walker]

Surprising end. Very powerful. Suicide is so scary, especially when you're so close to it... Good write.

[Marie]

That is a good ending--and it came so quick. Very effective.

[mark slade]

great poem. very Gothic.

[Victoria PoetryBunny]

Nice write, I love the feeling behind each line of hers to his.