My Night Last night

This is a true story of what happened between my bf and me...except for the ending! hes' aLIVE!

He told me life wasn't worth living,

I told him to live for me,

 

He told me he stuffs everything up,

I told him he still has me,

 

He told me he's not worth it,

I told him he's worth the world.

 

He told me he'd never be happy,

so I told him, I'd make him.

 

He told me he loves me,

I told him, I'll never stop.

 

He told me he wants  to end everything.

so I asked if that included me.

 

He said, No babe, don't twist what I say,

I said, but I thought I was your everything.

 

He's suicidal and there's nothing I can do,

and I wiped the tears from my eyes as I cried,

 

"You're the only thing keeping me here" he said

"Please don't leave me!" I begged and I begged

 

But it was no use, he was already dead.

 

 

 

Author's Note

# he didn't actually die, but i thought that was a good ending

Reviews

[Your Perfect Disaster]

I've had talks like this many a time into the night. Just sitting there, listening and letting others talk to me, calming them out of thoughts. I really like this and it's sad that this is real because i know the pain that comes with a suicidal person is very intense. Keep writing though, it's a lovely poem. ^-^

[reflectingus]

I really loved this poem, though the last part made me so sad :( The twist of words have made this poem unique, I love the sweetness and honesty of it. So heartfelt, and so true to love, great job.

[Britt]

This almost made me cry but I loved it! :)

[xSamilynnx]

I almost cried T_T almost means this is fantastic :D really good i like it alot!!!!

[symmetryAsymmetry]

very well written.. :-)

[J. J. Nightingale]

Hummm .. Disturbing Topic ... Hope he has a change of mind ...

Jazz ..

[Cascara (aka Sprint Goe..]

really sad...

but, nice to see a twist at the end of a typically heartbreaking poem concerning love

[Vic]

This was painfully sad, but still very good. It flowed nicely, keep it up!