My Night Last night

This is a true story of what happened between my bf and me...except for the ending! hes' aLIVE!

He told me life wasn't worth living,

I told him to live for me,

 

He told me he stuffs everything up,

I told him he still has me,

 

He told me he's not worth it,

I told him he's worth the world.

 

He told me he'd never be happy,

so I told him, I'd make him.

 

He told me he loves me,

I told him, I'll never stop.

 

He told me he wants  to end everything.

so I asked if that included me.

 

He said, No babe, don't twist what I say,

I said, but I thought I was your everything.

 

He's suicidal and there's nothing I can do,

and I wiped the tears from my eyes as I cried,

 

"You're the only thing keeping me here" he said

"Please don't leave me!" I begged and I begged

 

But it was no use, he was already dead.

 

 

 

Author's Note

# he didn't actually die, but i thought that was a good ending

Reviews

[Your Perfect Disaster]

I've had talks like this many a time into the night. Just sitting there, listening and letting others talk to me, calming them out of thoughts. I really like this and it's sad that this is real because i know the pain that comes with a suicidal person is very intense. Keep writing though, it's a lovely poem. ^-^

[Drifter]

Sad and packed with a lot of emotion. I've never had a suicidal friend, and I hope I never have to deal with that kind of pain or sorrow

[bluessadmood]

this is so good my friend.i really loved this
you told about a whole life in a few words..
how it never appeals to me,no taste,nothing
never worth it living,not worth the effort
but here comes she ,ohh love how you change
the picture of everything ,how you change it to drama
and then comes the tears and emotions rises,love still deepens
more,looks exchanged harder ,meaning هintensified,like some other vision
just found,tears moistens the picture and its mellow again,think its worth trying it again
i loved your story ,how the flow was easy,really enjoyed it all
lovely write

[Amila Jay]

This reminded me of a song called 'easy tonight' by five for fighting. anyway, it's a good poem. :))

[Krimson]

i love this , its deep and it takes me back to so many nights ive had myself .. this is a real deep and senstitve subject tht for some reason i too enjoy writing about . i love how his was writen in a short and sweet matter, easy to get the piont across yet so deep, so passionate, so beautiful and real..

[Dr. S. D. Blankenship D..]

Hm, What a heartfelt piece, you have typed up. Explaining what we each feel, and/or wanted to say, but never found the words to. :) Great poem.

~S. D. Blankenship

[quixotic_rose]

definitely a good ending. I like a tough girl who can deal with someone such as who puts a damper on the good things in life and think they aren't worth it when there's a person right in front of them cheering them on and wanting the best for them. very well written :)

[Tomislav Petricevic]

A sad poem, but really beautiful. And it is a good ending! :D

[Thomas Fitzgerald]

Indeed, an ending to envy really, well done, good read.

[AK]

Very nice poem. I've observed something again, your poems usually go in the
he said so and so,
I said so and so
sequence.
It is really nice but again the end was a bit weird.

this is beautiful