Ich Liebe Dich

He calls me his angel

I call him my bear.

 

He holds my hand

running my fingers through his hair,

 

I look him in the eye,

he's my cutie pie.

 

He's my protector,

his strength makes me feel safe.

 

Fall asleep in his arms,

he wakes up in mine

 

when we're apart,

he's always in my heart.

 

He's the king of all Huggers,

He makes my day great.

 

When he kisses me hello,

When I'm kissing him goodbye,

 

I will always love him,

he will always love I.

 

Author's Note

# I know that "He will always love I" is grammatically incorrect, but I wanted it to rhyme with goodbye.

Reviews

[patricia]

He's the king of all huggers, was my favourite line. This was nice. Thankyou.

[Morrigan Nicole]

awsome! It's like me and my guy!!!

[Lowesy]

Ok. This is a lovely sentiment, it's clear how you feel about this man and how he feels about you. The punctuation needs work, like, there are commas in there that shouldn't be in there and no commas where there should be.
The flow is a bit stuttering as well, some of it is free verse, others are rhyming couplets, for example, 'I look him in the eye, he's my cutie pie. He's my protector, his strength makes me feel safe'. Not only is this a break in pattern but the lines haven't even got the same length, time, syllables, words and so on, they're different, it disrupts the flow. Hope this helps.

[Angelic Surrender]

This is awesome and beautiful! great work :)

[SapphirianVampiress]

Wow this is amazing
Love is always with us no matter what is a great point
I love it :)

[Raven Starhawk]

Love stays with us all and especially for someone who has gone away or drifted away or perhaps something came between lovers, but I sense here it is completely different. This was a treasure. I know I might say that a lot but it doesn't make it any less true.

[Thomas Fitzgerald]

Perfectly sweet, well done.

[Alex Vidmar]

Great. :) i love how the title is in German, but the rest of it is in English. Well done.

[Marie]

Very nice poem. tells of a sweet, tender love. I almost didn't get the title at first, but I have just enough German to translate.

[reflectingus]

AWWW :) I really like how you gave this poem a german title, that makes it a bit different than the typical 'i love you', and this poem is soo cute :)