S.L.U.T

a poem about a girl who used to be my best friend, but she decided she'd rather sleep around, then have any real friends, and just left me.

Does it feel good?

knowing nobody loves you,

knowing you left us all behind,

Knowing that your being used.

 

Do you realise?

That your privacy is online,

That you're labelled 'A good time'

You lost all our respect.

 

Do you notice?

your just an object,

some one to f**k with,

with no added drama,

 

Does your daddy know?

You slept with every boy in town,

Bet your mummy doesn't realise,

that your sleeping around.

 

Do you feel good?

when you look at yourself in the mirror,

you're all alone now.

Is it all becoming clearer?

 

Are you surprised?

That you don't have a disease,

That they aren't coming back for more?

That you turned out to be a f*****g w***e.

Author's Note

#I don't like swearing, usually i avoid it, but this is about something that has hurt me alot, and I just needed to use those words, the wounds haven't healed yet and I feel so strongly about this!!! so im sorry if that word offends you.

Reviews

[5minutesofcrazy]

This is just beautiful. The raw emotions that are left here are quite powerful, and you've been able to harness them just enough to create something with them. It is a powerful work that is easily relatable. I feel that too many times we don't give anger enough credit for it's power to be creative, but this proves that wrong. The structure is nice, repeating a question is brilliant. I'd love to know what sparked this gem to be written. Thank you.

[Deandra Dawn]

So much power and force behind your words. Nicely done portraying such emotion.

[Sarah]

realy good and realy powerful.

[Krista Punk]

This is a really strong poem...really made me think....there are sadly a lot of girls like this in just about everywhere....can't really do anything about it...all in all I really liked it ^^ you portreyed a lot of anger and maybe even insult

[Half Dream]

Powerful yet so wonderfully written. Great job. :)

[Chrissy]

I loved this very much. It had power in it.

[Elisabeth]

Yeah, which used to be a friend .. now is the garbage dump to put herself out in the trash. But, I do not want to be in the trash with her.
Accept it!! and do not even try to forget it!! will help heal our wounds.
Because I know I did not deserve it.

The poem is presented with a plain. Swearing become Art when presented with a specific purpose.

" Being friendless taught me how to be a friend. Funny how that works. "
[Colleen Wainwright]

regards,

Liz

[johnnyqueer]

I loved the flow of this. It needs some editing, but as long as you're not picky about it, it doesn't really matter. Nice write :)

[khalid]

i have already read it, thank you

[reflectingus]

Oh this is great. I think the swearing makes perfect sense in circumstances like these. I can totally relate to this now, because I used to have many great friends, then they all changed and moved in different, senseless directions. It's rather pathetic and depressing at the same time. Now you know who she really is, and well, let her be whoever she is, it's her loss. As far as the poetry, I like the way you have a question at the beginning of each stanza, and the rhythm is great. Ending's perfect, great job.

[Johnny Joe]

Great emotion! You can feel the anger and hurt between the lines ..great poem