S.L.U.T

a poem about a girl who used to be my best friend, but she decided she'd rather sleep around, then have any real friends, and just left me.

Does it feel good?

knowing nobody loves you,

knowing you left us all behind,

Knowing that your being used.

 

Do you realise?

That your privacy is online,

That you're labelled 'A good time'

You lost all our respect.

 

Do you notice?

your just an object,

some one to f**k with,

with no added drama,

 

Does your daddy know?

You slept with every boy in town,

Bet your mummy doesn't realise,

that your sleeping around.

 

Do you feel good?

when you look at yourself in the mirror,

you're all alone now.

Is it all becoming clearer?

 

Are you surprised?

That you don't have a disease,

That they aren't coming back for more?

That you turned out to be a f*****g w***e.

Author's Note

#I don't like swearing, usually i avoid it, but this is about something that has hurt me alot, and I just needed to use those words, the wounds haven't healed yet and I feel so strongly about this!!! so im sorry if that word offends you.

Reviews

[5minutesofcrazy]

This is just beautiful. The raw emotions that are left here are quite powerful, and you've been able to harness them just enough to create something with them. It is a powerful work that is easily relatable. I feel that too many times we don't give anger enough credit for it's power to be creative, but this proves that wrong. The structure is nice, repeating a question is brilliant. I'd love to know what sparked this gem to be written. Thank you.

[Raven Starhawk]

This reminds me of a friend who was actually a man. He would act as though he was the innocent type with no real experience with women and yet...he told hundred of girls the same thing over and over again. He'd want them to sex chat with them through FB messaging or text messaging and it was the same bullshit over and over again. I fell for it. I fell for his charms but now I see I was just another used toy he liked to play with.

[Cathy Wattam]

This is a very honest poem. I'm not much one for swearing but it is after all, your poem and your choice of words. I can see on this occasion why you felt it necessary. Just watch the word "your" which on a couple of occasions should be "you're" as in:-
"Knowing that your being used"
"your just an object,"
"that your sleeping around"

Apart from that, it's a good write.

[Destiny Crawford]

Hurtful, yes. Beautiful, abosolutely. The inportant thing here is; you did a wonderful job. It doesnt matter what I think about this (even though I like it). What matters is whether you like it or not. I personally think that you shoud be very proud of yourself :)

~Destiny

[♋ Iris ♋]

Very strong vibe coming off this one. I like the power. Great write. Keep it up~!

[brigid]

you can use whatever words you want..it is your poem after all, and its use in the last line is very powerful for it. very emotive and strong writing from an angry dark yet clear place.nice

[WILDERNESS]

good work

[WILDERNESS]

time heals but lessons must be learned............

[quixotic_rose]

I can apply this to so many people I know. In my school being a w***e/s**t or 'pretending' to be one is so common/'cool' it's literally sickening. Writing about this topic would probably make me use some select swear words as well. It was beautifully written and captured the essence of the "s.l.u.t" :)

[Octob3r Star]

Goodness :)

[Opposum]

I dont know, its a bit direct but an awsome poem. *thumbs up*