S.L.U.T

a poem about a girl who used to be my best friend, but she decided she'd rather sleep around, then have any real friends, and just left me.

Does it feel good?

knowing nobody loves you,

knowing you left us all behind,

Knowing that your being used.

 

Do you realise?

That your privacy is online,

That you're labelled 'A good time'

You lost all our respect.

 

Do you notice?

your just an object,

some one to f**k with,

with no added drama,

 

Does your daddy know?

You slept with every boy in town,

Bet your mummy doesn't realise,

that your sleeping around.

 

Do you feel good?

when you look at yourself in the mirror,

you're all alone now.

Is it all becoming clearer?

 

Are you surprised?

That you don't have a disease,

That they aren't coming back for more?

That you turned out to be a f*****g w***e.

Author's Note

#I don't like swearing, usually i avoid it, but this is about something that has hurt me alot, and I just needed to use those words, the wounds haven't healed yet and I feel so strongly about this!!! so im sorry if that word offends you.

Reviews

[5minutesofcrazy]

This is just beautiful. The raw emotions that are left here are quite powerful, and you've been able to harness them just enough to create something with them. It is a powerful work that is easily relatable. I feel that too many times we don't give anger enough credit for it's power to be creative, but this proves that wrong. The structure is nice, repeating a question is brilliant. I'd love to know what sparked this gem to be written. Thank you.

[Bourbon Key]

Holy F*****g S**t! that poem is STRAIGHT to tha point!

[khalid]

your hatrd to the girl you write here about can be felt in every line, every word, every letter. away from those feelings, it is nicely written. i like it

[Jasmine]

ouch!
Well, it seemed like you needed to write this, like a healing process. Well done for getting it out.

[SparksLC]

WOW. I dig this. This is amazing~ I really liked this. I could feel the emotion thriving throughout this piece. Great work. I can definitely emphasize with you. It really sucks to have someone you care about so much, betray you on the drop of a hat. Also, I think the language used in this was necessary to express exactly how you felt and how much she hurt you. Good job! I can't wait to read more!

[Victoria PoetryBunny]

I like your authors note, it ain't fun to swear especially when it is not something you like. Though when venting emotions about a certain situation like you have done here it seems, well... sometimes swearing just seems to help a bit more.
You wrote this well as a good venting to the situation that hurt you with your friend you lost. Her decision. Her loss. The words don't offend me any, you used them well to my eyes, just for a good vent and a good poem with those very feelings from your author's note. Nice write. Feel free to vent when writing, it helps sometimes.

[Jack Isaac]

Of course, poetry is about speaking your mind, and in such a way that people remember... and all they really remember is if it was effective or not. This write is definitely effective! Really makes me think about the issues. Nice style in leading each quatrain with a question. Very well written and expressed.

[Tai Ryens]

Powerful use of words in this poem, and a very interesting topic to write about. You say you may give up writing because of a grade; don't. Just saying. You're pieces are amazingly plastered with your idea's.

[Amila Jay]

A powerful write:))

[Reaper]

i could use this poem as a guideline of my life. i know a lot of s***s or w****s, and this truly sums them up

[The old me]

wow lol. interesting subject matter but awesome poem. well done