S.L.U.T

a poem about a girl who used to be my best friend, but she decided she'd rather sleep around, then have any real friends, and just left me.

Does it feel good?

knowing nobody loves you,

knowing you left us all behind,

Knowing that your being used.

 

Do you realise?

That your privacy is online,

That you're labelled 'A good time'

You lost all our respect.

 

Do you notice?

your just an object,

some one to f**k with,

with no added drama,

 

Does your daddy know?

You slept with every boy in town,

Bet your mummy doesn't realise,

that your sleeping around.

 

Do you feel good?

when you look at yourself in the mirror,

you're all alone now.

Is it all becoming clearer?

 

Are you surprised?

That you don't have a disease,

That they aren't coming back for more?

That you turned out to be a f*****g w***e.

Author's Note

#I don't like swearing, usually i avoid it, but this is about something that has hurt me alot, and I just needed to use those words, the wounds haven't healed yet and I feel so strongly about this!!! so im sorry if that word offends you.

Reviews

[5minutesofcrazy]

This is just beautiful. The raw emotions that are left here are quite powerful, and you've been able to harness them just enough to create something with them. It is a powerful work that is easily relatable. I feel that too many times we don't give anger enough credit for it's power to be creative, but this proves that wrong. The structure is nice, repeating a question is brilliant. I'd love to know what sparked this gem to be written. Thank you.

[Divinity Sleeps in This]

Clever and catty, but I feel bad for the s***s, I sorta imagine to myself that they really just need cuddles!

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Honest feelings need no apologies. I have to say, although what she did to you is awful and undeserved, I feel sorry for the girl who made you feel these painful emotions. She is obviously troubled and is acting out for attention and love but doing in all the most damaging ways. That is going to hurt her far more than you in the long run. Thank you for bringing something real to the table. It is very brave.

[Bare trees]

I don't usually like cursing or rants but I commend you for the authors note. It shows you have class. Your emotions are honest in this and it makes for a good release of energy.
You're becoming quite popular. Good job.

[Xerclipse]

this was the most harsh writing I read so far. :P its good tho

[Crystal Marie Dreier]

Wow this is filled with such anger and pain. I liked this ne a lot and in my opinion I would have given it to the girl and be like this is how I feel but that mint not be such a good idea.. I dont know but someone needs to tell her how she has effected everyone in her life.

[SapphirianVampiress]

Extremely srong emotion filled words that should make people think, you would hope. It is very well composed and expressed I love it :)

[Becky Clancy]

Wow...that was rather dark...kinda mean in a way to me, I still like it, you really know how to show your emotions through your writing, When you swear within your work, thats when to me you show your true emotions (: keep up the good work and keep writing