S.L.U.T

a poem about a girl who used to be my best friend, but she decided she'd rather sleep around, then have any real friends, and just left me.

Does it feel good?

knowing nobody loves you,

knowing you left us all behind,

Knowing that your being used.

 

Do you realise?

That your privacy is online,

That you're labelled 'A good time'

You lost all our respect.

 

Do you notice?

your just an object,

some one to f**k with,

with no added drama,

 

Does your daddy know?

You slept with every boy in town,

Bet your mummy doesn't realise,

that your sleeping around.

 

Do you feel good?

when you look at yourself in the mirror,

you're all alone now.

Is it all becoming clearer?

 

Are you surprised?

That you don't have a disease,

That they aren't coming back for more?

That you turned out to be a f*****g w***e.

Author's Note

#I don't like swearing, usually i avoid it, but this is about something that has hurt me alot, and I just needed to use those words, the wounds haven't healed yet and I feel so strongly about this!!! so im sorry if that word offends you.

Reviews

[5minutesofcrazy]

This is just beautiful. The raw emotions that are left here are quite powerful, and you've been able to harness them just enough to create something with them. It is a powerful work that is easily relatable. I feel that too many times we don't give anger enough credit for it's power to be creative, but this proves that wrong. The structure is nice, repeating a question is brilliant. I'd love to know what sparked this gem to be written. Thank you.

[patricia]

it was an interesting poem, I found myself questioning the motives of the writer for warning her friend in this way, the key line for me and the only indication of the truer feelings here is in...knowing you left us all behind. This is a good vent though, if I had a friend like that, I would use this to get it all out but not send it, then I would sit down and write what it feels like to be suddenly put on the back burner, to be left with a big hole where your friend used to be, to feel angry at the way I felt ignored...etc. You realy got me going on this one. Thankyou

[Thomas Fitzgerald]

I think the swearing lends to the severity of the piece, well done.

[Sunflower]

i love this, i can really relate to the feelings you express in this, very well written

[Thea]

Very powerful...Well, it's really hard to find "true friends" nowadays...A really great piece...Keep it up!
:)))

[Dayran]

An exposure of something that would otherwise engage us in a private identity of ourselves is a terrible loss. But as Lewis Caroll says in 'Alice,' if you're too far out in the ocean, you might as well swim to the other shore. Ostentiously, there's another new identity out there, still private and personal.....a rediscovery of innocence. Nice write!

[jennifer little]

great job on this wonderful poetry loved reading it and thanks again for sharing this with me

[Patient Poet (Yos)]

Good questions ... I am so happy you are not that type of a girl , you are right its hurts ... but you dont have a control on other dids

[Tomislav Petricevic]

Powerful and well written! Sadly, these kind of situations really occur a lot.

[That_Guy]

well done

[Chris T.]

I commend you for the voice of this poem. You certainly presented the pain of losing a friend like this.

Constructive Criticism Time: It could have been more...personal? It's a heck of a balancing act writing a poem that one can relate to, yet at the same time, is the writer's voice and personal story. If I didn't have the author's note, it would have been more of a "general, i can somewhat relate to this" poem. Perhaps you could dig deep into this personal matter, this (hopefully closed) wound, and tear it open, and let it spill out into the poem. Just some food for thought.