S.L.U.T

a poem about a girl who used to be my best friend, but she decided she'd rather sleep around, then have any real friends, and just left me.

Does it feel good?

knowing nobody loves you,

knowing you left us all behind,

Knowing that your being used.

 

Do you realise?

That your privacy is online,

That you're labelled 'A good time'

You lost all our respect.

 

Do you notice?

your just an object,

some one to f**k with,

with no added drama,

 

Does your daddy know?

You slept with every boy in town,

Bet your mummy doesn't realise,

that your sleeping around.

 

Do you feel good?

when you look at yourself in the mirror,

you're all alone now.

Is it all becoming clearer?

 

Are you surprised?

That you don't have a disease,

That they aren't coming back for more?

That you turned out to be a f*****g w***e.

Author's Note

#I don't like swearing, usually i avoid it, but this is about something that has hurt me alot, and I just needed to use those words, the wounds haven't healed yet and I feel so strongly about this!!! so im sorry if that word offends you.

Reviews

[5minutesofcrazy]

This is just beautiful. The raw emotions that are left here are quite powerful, and you've been able to harness them just enough to create something with them. It is a powerful work that is easily relatable. I feel that too many times we don't give anger enough credit for it's power to be creative, but this proves that wrong. The structure is nice, repeating a question is brilliant. I'd love to know what sparked this gem to be written. Thank you.

[K-mo]

this has a good message to it, great work!

[Jock Engelman]

i dont agree with swearing, but the use of the word "w***e" in my book is fine as it is a descriptive stereotype term. but you might have been able to find another word to replace "f**k" and "f*****g" but whatever you need to do to express your harsh and sore emotions. that is the point of poetry i believe.

the following lines i like very much because they make me think:
"Do you feel good?
when you look at yourself in the mirror,
you're all alone now.
Is it all becoming clearer?
Are you surprised?
That you don't have a disease,
That they aren't coming back for more?
That you turned out to be a f*****g w***e."

[mariah]

ouch. i feel bad for girls like that though. they dont realise that they are being used as objects and that the fact that their a human being is overlooked.

[Michael Opoku-Addo]

Good poem. Forget about people like this.

[closed..acct]

Goodness this is powerful, painful to lose a friend i must agree with that.

[zero binty]

Painful way to lose a friend. When it all comes down, will you still be there for her?

[Kala Benfield]

This is great! if only every girl in my town could see this.

[sammy sam sam]

hahaa.. this is real.

[S. Michael Long]

i get what you mean about the swearing.. i hate using it too, but i have tried to venture out with using it, and i think it can serve a purpose in my writing, much like it has served a purpose in yours. I would recommend working on the perspective of the poem, and trying to eliminate any "you" or "yours" or "that they" type expressions, because they detract from the ultimate viewer, who is the reader, you want to make sure that the reader can relate to what you are trying to tell them, so when a reader reads, you or your or they, we associate it with US or the reader. This is a fantastic poem.. keep it up!