What's mine is yours, and what's yours is ours

Can you figure out what this is about? thats my challenge to you.

forehead sweating,

tears streaming.

agony forms within me.

I can't breathe I can't speak

all I can do is scream

 

i grab your hand and you yelp in pain

you don't even know what that means..

all the things you've put me through

it's been such a long journey

but now its time to move on

and start a new one.

 

I wanna run I wanna hide.

but that is not an option

it's killing me deep inside

as the door slowly widens

and here she comes

straight through the opening,

 

i gasp and i cry

my baby girl has just entered the world

and all is forgiven

all the pain was worth all the joy in this world.

what's mine is yours and whats yours is ours.

 

 

 

Author's Note

a poem about one of the most beautiful things you can experience,

Reviews

[K.C. Zbryk]

This was a very unique view of child birth, and very well done. It misleads the reader with the first few stanzas but in the end you make it very clear what the piece was about. Birth. This was still a very unique and well penned and i like the mystery that you wove through the piece.

[reflectingus]

Wow! I could feel the sweat as I started reading this, it is so full of emotion and liveliness, and yes, this indeed is a very beautiful experience. I love the shift in mood, from anxiety, to finally her birth bringing joy, and the ending was just so beautiful. I like the riddle-y kind of title, made me wonder what this could be about, and it was great to read. It was thoughtful of you to write about childbirth, so many emotions nicely expressed, good job.

[Angelic Surrender]

This is so beautiful.

[House of Immite]

I love this! This is the kind of poem that makes me want to read it a couple of times to actually understand it!!! The first three stanzas describe the process in a way that keeps everything vague, all until you finally say it in the end. A good piece of writing you got there :D

I think you should develop this technique in future poems :)

[SlipKnoT]

thats soo cool, i thought it was about something else then i realised it was about a lady having a child.

[hmm]

interesting & quite intriguing.
I enjoyed this write.

[Sunflower]

very nice write

[Yari Garcia (Older Prof..]

Very interesting. Took me some reading to figure out what you were talking about. I loved it once I realized ^_^ Very good poem. Thanks for sharing.