What's mine is yours, and what's yours is ours

Can you figure out what this is about? thats my challenge to you.

forehead sweating,

tears streaming.

agony forms within me.

I can't breathe I can't speak

all I can do is scream

 

i grab your hand and you yelp in pain

you don't even know what that means..

all the things you've put me through

it's been such a long journey

but now its time to move on

and start a new one.

 

I wanna run I wanna hide.

but that is not an option

it's killing me deep inside

as the door slowly widens

and here she comes

straight through the opening,

 

i gasp and i cry

my baby girl has just entered the world

and all is forgiven

all the pain was worth all the joy in this world.

what's mine is yours and whats yours is ours.

 

 

 

Author's Note

a poem about one of the most beautiful things you can experience,

Reviews

[K.C. Zbryk]

This was a very unique view of child birth, and very well done. It misleads the reader with the first few stanzas but in the end you make it very clear what the piece was about. Birth. This was still a very unique and well penned and i like the mystery that you wove through the piece.

[Kiari Sabon]

i love it keep up the work

[R.A. Youngblood]

I really like this! It's kind an emotional and delightful, i like the way you expressed every thought. Thanks for sharing..Keep it up!

[Emerald Seas]

Nicely done! It is the moment of truth, and beauty, and a new future, but nothing worth having is ever without pain. You did a fine job with this poem!!

[Elisabeth]

when a mother's painful, but feeling gratified by a family.. *nodded
It's a good message.. :))

[Summer'sBreeze]

beautiful.

[Sleeping Maiden]

Hmmm this is really unique.. childbirth is actually one of the most painful experiences a woman goes through in life. It can be traumatic, joyful, anxiety fills you, it's frightening... all these emotions swirling inside you... BOY... no wonder a woman is such a fighter!! ha ha.. but really, i love the way you expressed this. I've seen childbirth a few times.. it's one of those things that can be shocking at first.. but there is that simple joy of seeing your own child... delightful really..
And no, i've never been pregnant.. not yet.. >.< but i've seen the pregnancy happen and all...

So this was really fascinating.. Good work SuicidePact!!! I adored this. You made the reader feel exactly what you wrote. Awesome job!

[Renée]

Childbirth is even more that this....lovely expression

[Diwakar - "The Warrior ..]

Brilliantly expressed and written, I can see the emotions with which it is written ...... very nice write :-)

[Suditi]

Oh my.
Such a beautiful piece.
So many emotions, penned so wonderfully!
I LOVE it!

[r. f. jordan]

beautiful poem about a beautiful subject. nice read.