What's mine is yours, and what's yours is ours

Can you figure out what this is about? thats my challenge to you.

forehead sweating,

tears streaming.

agony forms within me.

I can't breathe I can't speak

all I can do is scream

 

i grab your hand and you yelp in pain

you don't even know what that means..

all the things you've put me through

it's been such a long journey

but now its time to move on

and start a new one.

 

I wanna run I wanna hide.

but that is not an option

it's killing me deep inside

as the door slowly widens

and here she comes

straight through the opening,

 

i gasp and i cry

my baby girl has just entered the world

and all is forgiven

all the pain was worth all the joy in this world.

what's mine is yours and whats yours is ours.

 

 

 

Author's Note

a poem about one of the most beautiful things you can experience,

Reviews

[K.C. Zbryk]

This was a very unique view of child birth, and very well done. It misleads the reader with the first few stanzas but in the end you make it very clear what the piece was about. Birth. This was still a very unique and well penned and i like the mystery that you wove through the piece.

[luna11]

Child birth. Everything I hear about it puts me off. This poem shows the pleasure and the pain. I've only ever heard about the pain. I suppose I can't really guess how it feels. The only people who really know are those who have gone through it. And you have to go through hardships to get happiness. I've never read a poem about this. If I had known that this poem would be about child birth, I wouldn't have read it, but I'm glad the title didn't give it away because this was so nice to read :)
Beautifully written
xx

[Marie]

Story of a wonderful journey...to a happy ending.

[Victoria Elizabeth]

very good me only being 15 its kinda hard to understand but it the poem I understand it perfectly

[Alex Crow]

It shows the pain of childbirth and the joy that a mother feels when she sees her child. Very uncommon read, but a very good one.

[Laura Storm]

This is an amazing piece. It shows both sides of child birth. The good and the bad, in a very creative way. I myself have never had a child but I could tell right from the first stanza that it was about it. To me child birth has always been somehting of a fear and a punishment. (seeing as I'm a teen and showing us birthing videos is a way to control sex apparently) This truely does show that in the end the child is worth the work. I may not be ready for one yet but it puts my heart to ease to see the true beauty and emotions of it all. Great write. Sorry bout rambling on. :)

[khalid]

this is the highest degree of love, nothing is for only one. i like it

[Maximillion]

wow i like alot i liked all of your poem so far

[Pencrafter]

In the Cafe, as well as anywhere on line, you don't really know who you're talking to. Someone who claims to be a sixteen year old boy could actually be a plump grandmother. Anyway, as a male who has never given birth, I can't own to really understand the experience. Writers, such as yourself, greatly help in conveying the emotions and pain of such a blessed event. Keep up the good work, the writing, that is.

[Brianna Van Zandt]

This is beautiful. Keep it up :) (And you said you weren't good at poetry.. You lie! You're amazing at it!)

[I'm Just me:)]

this was interesting, great descritions and i really liked this one it really gets you then pulls in and bam amazing ending :) i love this