What's mine is yours, and what's yours is ours

Can you figure out what this is about? thats my challenge to you.

forehead sweating,

tears streaming.

agony forms within me.

I can't breathe I can't speak

all I can do is scream

 

i grab your hand and you yelp in pain

you don't even know what that means..

all the things you've put me through

it's been such a long journey

but now its time to move on

and start a new one.

 

I wanna run I wanna hide.

but that is not an option

it's killing me deep inside

as the door slowly widens

and here she comes

straight through the opening,

 

i gasp and i cry

my baby girl has just entered the world

and all is forgiven

all the pain was worth all the joy in this world.

what's mine is yours and whats yours is ours.

 

 

 

Author's Note

a poem about one of the most beautiful things you can experience,

Reviews

[K.C. Zbryk]

This was a very unique view of child birth, and very well done. It misleads the reader with the first few stanzas but in the end you make it very clear what the piece was about. Birth. This was still a very unique and well penned and i like the mystery that you wove through the piece.

[SkrillexLover :)]

This was beautiful. :) Wonderful poem! Lovely description of the most important experience in a mother's life, giving birth to their child. Loved it :)

[Raven Starhawk]

In the beginning this was every bit the pain I feel and have been feeling for some time now. The world is in agony and perhaps without much of a chance to survive since we think small in terms of existence, but I won't ramble about that. Then this taps on something that I can fully embrace. Such lovely words. Of course I could have the beginning all wrong to. o.O Anyways...great as always.

[caroline]

a wonderful description of birth, the fear, the pain the joy!

[DeliriousCerises]

This was enjoyable to read. It views childbirth in a new a unique way. I love how it seems like something else completely in the beginning and then viola, we know exactly what it's about and the whole thing makes perfect sense. Well done. I'm a bit confused as to why you chose to capitalize some things and not others, but I guess that doesn't really matter, the message is beautiful.

[Heromen Selena]

I know what it's about :) Painful in the beginning but I like the ending very much. Nice Job.

[Mockingbird]

very personal view of childhood. it must be the ultimate joy a woman can experience. great poem.

[joshua deathdealer]

Nice. I like the sentimental's. Thanks for sharing.

[Johnny Joe]

Love it!!!

[The White Wolf]

Ooooh, I love puzzles...
I think this is about birth but from the fathers perspective. I also think the father is not the real father....but I am turning this probably into an episode of Maury Povich. That is just my impression..kind of made me think so when you were saying things like "it is killing me" and "all is forgiven", like the man is going to be the father no matter what.
Regardless, sorry for my rambling, I liked this. A very interesting idea :)

[Secret Valentine]

I love this! It is so unique and so fantastically written. I actually saw the imagery in my head as I read each word. Good work.